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No Longer Burn

How can I stand the rainy day?
When being with you will never be the same.
Dripping the tear that cast your love away,
Drifting me faithlessness into the darkness.
I can't be with you any longer cuz our love have forsaken me to love you any further,
I can't explain the way you make me feel,
Cuz' the feeling no longer burn and my heart will be forever be seal.
Needless to say this is good-bye as our pain are beginning to fade away into the instant distance with no forgiveness.

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  • tearrsofthemoon
    July 31

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    I really like this piece here, you have done a great job writing it. Though, I do wish that you would enter a background, and also, just a personal preference here, I don't like when people write "cuz" instead of because. But perhaps it works with the flow of the poem better. I thank you for sharing this peice with me. I can completly relate. Thanks again, and good luck in my contest.