My tears fall
With sadness
And hatred
With pain
Because of you
I cannot explain
You ruined my life
At such a young age
Ruined everything
I wanted to be
Because of you
My life got crushed
Your eyes are burning
As if I’m a bad child
You see me frightened
And decide to hit me
Because of you
I suffer today
During the day
You was my best friend
At night you are
My worst nightmare
Because of you
I cry every night
I’m fed up of your little game,
You’re not a father to me anymore,
Live with, it Deal with it!
Goodbye
Author notes
something different....
i'm sorry....
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Its really good, try breaking up the last verse's 'live with it deal with it.' add a comma betweeen the two phrases just for emphasis and also changed the 'at night you was' to 'at night you were' it doesn't really make sense in the original form as its the wrong tense.
Its really good though and the experience you've used has been put across in an effective and passionate manner, x
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thanks xx
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