What is she thinking?
does she see my transfixed gazes at her beautiful face?
A beauty so profound,
I'm mesmerized.
I want to know,
beautiful angels face.
If only a simple name,
could take in,
and radiate the essence from within.
She's tired,
her heard droops,
eyes in a peaceful trance.
The light she shines with,
the everlasting light from within,
is intoxicating.
As I longingly stare at her face,
and body;
She turns her head;
I freeze;
Her angelic features are illuminated in the light,
High cheek bones,
defined jaw,
clear green eyes.
I'm transfixed,
her expression turns from surprise,
to disregard.
Slowly her eyes shut;
Author notes
Wrote this staring at a girl on the bus coming back from Project Grad.
June 6, 2009
What do you think? If I have an uncapitalized "i" please tell me=]
Comments
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line 11 it's head not heard just thought you'd want to know. Nice poem how do you manage to always have pen and paper handy? I never do when i need them. lol keep up the good work Ry.
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i like it, though the staring part is kinda creepy haha.
ur words paint beauty
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you're back. -
Simplistic beauty
Beautiful with every line..... simplicity is a rare poetic beauty. Wonderful write.
One Typo- "She's tired,
her heard droops,
eyes in a peaceful trance."
should 'heard' be 'head'?
Keep it up! -T
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