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White Horse

Once upon a time
I felt adored it was nice.
I was a maiden soon
to give my heart away.
In the moment of love
I was a princess at last.
I became close to him
sweep off my feet- happy!
Upon a white horse and
carried away to a castle.
In my mind of what I
believed was all mine.
My once upon a time
could not last- forever.
Being in love that high
sadly can't always last.
The moment where love is
all wonderful and blissful.
If only things could be
perfect once more in time.
By Sherry Finley

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  • klassy lassy
    August 24

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    Oh my..... I know this dream, too, but love is so many lessons to teach us that love is what makes us whole within ourselves. Sometimes love wears many different faces and knows the touch of many hearts, where we reflect in each one of them. And you know, where you reflect in another's face and heart is part of what they become, too.

    I've a friend who tells me that the heart is the seat of love...like a throne, or the bench of authority. Eyes are windows to the soul, and they have a spiritual faculty of seeing eternity. Ears are for discernment, taste is about choice, and touch... well, touch is the texture of sharing. Being in a blissful state, you are right, does not always last, but the love which molds and perfects us, and gives us a touch to share, is wherever and whenever our hearts are open to it.

    I love your heart, Sherry. It's like forget-me-knots and daisies.


  • Theater Of Dreams
    July 19

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    You have good friends...

    ...and they are wise. This was never meant to be a fairy tale, what you have written. Life was never meant to be so stressful within our mind, heart and body. Love needs a special place to grow- and as I see the planet, it is amazing it survives at all. What Myra says is true. We cannot grasp love perfectly, because NOTHING BUT God and his presence and domain is perfect. Ever wonder why we call Him Father?

    I adore you, and I am sorry I have let you down. I make no excuses for myself- because I too once believed in love so pure. I still believe...but I also believe it must have a sanctuary of something greater than two- to hold it together.

    Very precious work.

    ♥


  • myrataal silver member
    July 15

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    Love should last forever, not so, Sherry?

    But yes ... it is not Love that does not last, it is humanity that cannot grasp it perfectly! You are so sincere in everything you write -- straight from the heart! Thank you so much for the gift of you.

    Love
    Myra


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 15

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    excellent~

    Penned oh so excellent sis
    But reads so sad as well
    Love the imagery in the poem...felt as if I were there
    You should find a contest for this one it would be a winner
    I have up 2 news ones hope you drop by and see as well
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


    • Sherry gold member
      July 15

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      Hey Susan, Thanks I have been trying to revise the last two lines I think I have it right now how I want it. Really a contest piece you think? I don't know if I have the confidence in it being a winner but what a sweet thing to say. I will head on over to read yours. Thanks for your sweet reply. Ok how do you do the flower I forgot. Been gone to long and forgot how to do some of the things.


  • Frogzter gold member
    July 15

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    This is so poignant and heartfelt sissy! You still are a princess and your prince is waiting for you! You are still the fair maiden!

    Huggles,

    • Sherry gold member
      July 15
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      I love you ♥

      Sissy, Thank you I was trying to work with the last few lines some. Your comment made me smile. You touch my heart and life I am so thankful for you sissy.
      Love you always much love, Sissy ♥


  • Lurie
    July 15

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    That sounds like every little girls dream, then every young womans dream...I wish life was really like that, Handsome princes and castles among the clouds with rainbows and unicorns. I geuss we really never outgrow the dream. Lovely sis, It truly was lovely Sherry Bear

    • Sherry gold member
      July 15
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      Thanks

      I may work with the last two lines somewhat. Yes wouldn't what you said be great. I agree... Thank you dearly. ♥

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