another night on stilts,
exhausting-
you know I was made to dance
why else would you come...
not for the toys and holiday snaps;
backdrops to hide the spaces,
distract from tittering pauses-
diffuse potential guilt?
I know why you come here,
so...
ask
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this is so how I used to be
though these days
I tend to get the party started
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I'm a sucker for an ending that snaps you to attention. Yours did just that.
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I was just thinking of you Hope you're well. Thanks for coming by!
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this is so good...i love the ending, it's perfect and cuts right to the point. love the night on stilts, too.
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Stunningly brilliant.
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Thanks
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oh, I read this and paused, and read again - very effective writing. I confess I am a little chilled by the control of the final line...
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hehe, yeah, I had to pause and breathe for a sec before writing it and ending it there. Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks!
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Lovely, Chenoa.
Perfectly written - really. I adored the extended metaphor and the great imagery.
Really loved the rather pointed ending.
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thank you, love
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happy mad or sad mad someone asked me the other day
I replied ...mad
we're all mad here
it's a dance
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can't be helped, all that time spent in circles. in the interims, I just dance with myself woohoo haha hehe
glad you came by
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that's a nice sensation
and once you stop you don't
you keep spinning -
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and then everything is dancing
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and then the sensation of voma comes...
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but I'm very fond of cheetos, so it is at least brightly coloured
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très artistique
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the dances are all different. Different partners and different situations but the dance is the same. This plays out again and again and not just in your piece. You have a way around words in this case while still delivering the message. RC
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