'whoremaster general!'
I hissed and let go the pan handle
spittin' grease on my bare belly
serves me right fryin' him some eggs while naked.
don't wanna let on I can't cook worth shit.
made him a coffee and quietly drank
my morning co-cola in front the stove.
aw, but he's a cute one, him.
tall, I like 'em like that.
even broke down and met the family.
didn't run screamin' from the place
just set himself down in the yard
and proceeded to get ripped
with the rest the men.
unfiltered camels,
pluckin' the odd leaf off my tongue
remembering the barbecue
rinsed off in the pool
and the kids' wet feet pounding on the concrete
he looked at me, quiet, he said,
'you're cut from a different cloth than them...'
that's when I knew it was love...
and I passed him the smokes, nodded 'morning,
he squinted at me through the silver haze,
grimaced over his black coffee,
leaned back in a chrome chair,
swept his black hair off his forehead,
'those eggs're gonna burn, y'know...'
we jumped in his truck, headed for the IHOP.
Author notes
parts of this are alleged to be based on true stuff... just parts, though...
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your ability to capture each person so vividly impresses me always!
I enjoy reading you so much because you make me see moments in time - like a voyer and i just love it.
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Nothing wrong with alleged, lol. A nice poem you have written here, thank you for taking the time to enter.
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I love this language. You capture a real sense of character here (I think I said that to you before) and create a really convincing scene. I read it like I am a witness to the events. I can see them, man, I can even smell those eggs, damn. That opening line is just brilliant.
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dig the real language in this full of dry wit that gives hint to the underlying facets of our quirky natures.
alleged.. nice touch
the minimalist punctuation and lack of punctuation really adds to the everyman aspect. Kudos.
A
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a good piece, ah the chatty ways, sat around taking in the madness of life, as love burns in the pan.
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vivid and rich description, I felt like I was there while I read this.....great job
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parts of this are alleged to be just so very reminiscent of my life too...I like this write, well done!
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lol alleged is good
C
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