As the snow falls to the ground
I look up at the sky
and ask only one question
why?
it echoes through the sky
it reaches over mountains
yet the answer was never clear
no matter how many times I asked
as I lie here now dead in front of you
I don't want anyone to be sad, if anyone is
I want them to be glad
for my torment has finally come to an end
I lived my life as if everyday was my last
so you may think I don't leave regrets
but I leave a huge one behind
bigger then any words could explain
The regret of breaking a promise
what that promise is shall never be known
but the one I am talking about knows
of what I speak of
so with for my final words and wishes
I want all those that have come here
on this wonderful day
and those that this will be sent to
to live happy lives
the kind I was never able to
Author notes
this poem was made out of the blue, so it may not be good and the name might change!
What did you think?
Comments
1 - 14 of 14
-
You better not die Richard...and I don't know why you think your a bad poet...
-
this is beautiful!=)
-
nice, this was very well written! good write!
-
wow i really like this,but something leaves me on a thin thred.what was the promise? But i really like this! it gave me alot of ideas! and by the way you are not dieing any time soon! if it means i have to go to Nj!!!!! But this is really good an i think you should change the name it dose not sound like an ice poem i like Dark Angel 2013 ideas for names they suond cool!!! Nice job on this!!!
-
-
i am glad that you like it, and the promise well it will be known when the time is right!
Well we never know when we are going to die, it could be tmr or in a few hours
or even right after i write this, we never know! I shall keep the name because this is the part of the book that starts to get dark! but i might change it if i change my mind
but if i do this one must be burnt -
-
No dont burn it!!!! nooo can you tell me later i really want to know what the promise is!
-
-
-
this is freaking AWESOME! this is so emotional and passionate!!!! its wonderful i am quite speechless! my favorite line is "it echoes through the sky
it reaches over mountains yet the answer was never clear"
-
-
yeah i know, this is really the poem i plan to use at my funeral if i die any time soon!
-
-
that makes sense :->
-
-
-
This poem is very emotional.. I understand where you're coming from though. Leaving this earth with a broken promise hanging over your shoulder but it's not too late, You can still make up for that promise. Hell you may even be able to hold up the promise. I don't think it's sad though, I think it's real. I think it's right. It's right to realize what you did wrong but giving up on it isn't the answer. You should try to fix it before time is really up. I really don't like the title so it makes me very happy it is going to be changed.. I would suggest something more like 'tormented ending' or 'Promised ending'. Play around with those words and it should be grand. This poem has inspired me so thank you for posting it. Great job!
-
-
yeah i don't like the title myself but i am working on a better name now most likely have it by tonight! and well i am glad my poem inspired you, i am always here to help!
-
-
Yeah it's sad but I love it
-
It is sad. But I like it. Good Job ^-^
-
i'm.. speechless.. i like it.. but i dont like it... i'll tell u the details when u get online. *sighs*
Adding your comment:
1 - 14 of 14
