Now i think he might whisper,
the hard edges rounded away.
So that everyone would hear
the growls of truth laid bare
without pretense or delay.
Now i think he might whisper
like summer storms fill the air,
in a deep and insistent way,
so that everyone would hear.
No passing burden, this ideal of care
at times grown sunny, or dark and gray;
now i think he might whisper...
Molding love without fear,
to hold so boldly, he dared to say
so that everyone would hear
life has no walls, some simply appear
as night to bind us and cloud the day.
Now i think he might whisper,
so that everyone would hear
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Inspired by Victory Gin and my friend Zayra...
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Magnifique ...
and yes, I'm sure that Julian would have liked this.
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I did not know him in any extensive way, he was kind to me when i bgan writing on AP, gentle to my faults and very encouraging , very positive. I imagine we all have our recollections, mine were just that...a kind person who went out of his way to help me...thanks for all...hope all is well with you...PK
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thank you PK
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Very good poem, lines break worked well and added a soft rhythm to the lines.
Deep and insistent whispers, some people have the ability to reach others that way...
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thank you Mari-
yes the line breaks, something i saw in your forms...wonderful idea to make some things stand out, read better... thanks for all...h
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Exceptional. You said it fine, poet!
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Thank you-
was a pleasure to do this...PK
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wonderful...
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Thank you Cat...
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I like what you shared ...
and the way you shared it! The repetitive line works well and adds to the message that resounds. This is an enjoyable piece of art that would be easily remembered in my mind. Thanks for sharing! joy
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Thank you Joy-
I don't write in form a lot anymore, good to know i can still count to 19, in rhyme...
..thank you so much for your lovely comments...PK
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This is just lovely, PK . I like how you used the idea of the "last call" in layers, each adding recognition of a life lived and the messages spoken (and unspoken).
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Thank you Ten-
I don't do forms very often anymore, but this was an opportunity to give a small thank you, can't pass those by....Thanks for all...PK
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Some of us will always hear. Beautiful, Poet Man. I'm sure he's smiling. 
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I have been impressed reading his work and that so many people have such strong feelings..thanks for all...PK
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my email is zayra.yves@gmail.com
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Ah, love you man, you are a great soul!
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