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The Alley Part 6 (7-10-09)

As we passed by the open doors
I could see people
many people with no clue why they were all gathered there

Here is where I was able to get a good glance
at my "savior"
Taller than me, not by much, shoulder length black hair
was that something gleaming from his ears?
His looks alone took my breath away

Glaring eyes take my attention from him
making me reflect on every instant before I got here
nothing no where could tell me what was going on

Walking continually as if we were in another hallway
Finally he comes to a halt, then subsequently tells me to stand beside him

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