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Make a wish!

A flame flickers casting pale
shadows upon the wall
as it tries to escape from the
leaden wick that contains it
to the pale ivory wax base...

How softly it glows like
smudged autumn colours
embers pepper the base
and the wax melts just
like the moonlight melts
from the sky just before dawn...

I wait...

One wish...

One candle delicately

placed upon the vanilla

iced cake!

My breath slowly extinguishes
the untamed fire
and the wick crumbles.

My smile fades... everything i once heard is long forgotten silenced like the candles flame... still"
echos in my mind!

with the entrails of smoke
the only detail left that
the candle had been lit
away with it blows my wish!

I wish... For change!

and that candle continues to burn!

What does this mean to you?

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  • peadiotrocity101
    November 26
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    Gargantuan Poem

    I love how you wrote this piece of work or poem. I liked because you wrote a lot of complex words.Also it still was awesome and had a great genuine flow and I like that in poems.That is why I liked your poem.It had a lot of spice, but salt to cover the missing links.Great Job!Keep It up plz thank you for this wonderful poem.

  • cool, nice job! the idea is good, and the words are very descriptive! keep penning such good stuff-- i'm waiting!


  • cupcakealia
    July 14
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    Nicely penned!
    Gr8 gob!