My heart was choked with ice,
it seemed,
My blood cold,
unfeeling...
Music lost it's joy,
it seemed,
The notes sounding lame,
pallid....
But...
I saw you...
Your face brightened my shadow,
Your laugh,
Your voice.... indescribable
You have fathomless eyes,
You electrified me,
with a simple kiss...
When you need me,
I'll run to you,
If you want me,
I'll protect you,
Wherever you are,
my heart longs and follows...
Author notes
This is one I sent my girlfriend. I wrote it with her in mind, of course 
Can you feel the love tonight? lol
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I still love this one soooooooo much =]
I'm so lucky to have you! -
Awww
How sweet. Good job with this.
(Sorry I can't write more I have my little princess in my arms)
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Have you seen her yet?
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I managed to sneak up on her at an sga meeting.
I biked down to vanguard and told her i was "doing yardwork."
I'll be seeing her for a few minutes tomorrow too. -
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Have you been able to ask her on a real date, like to the movies or something?
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Oh my, isn't this a powerful little write!!
Well!
The continuous "..." emphasized the overall vagueness, an aspect often found in deep love poems. I felt that the general placing and selection of words really constructed the foundation for such strong emotion; the way things were said formed the love and longing you vividly expressed. Overall, I loved this poem very much!! Great work love!!
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Wow, thanks! I didn't even think about that as I wrote it, it just seemed right.
I might actually have a style all my own now
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sure thing! you definitely have something going there! ( ;
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opps, forgot to give you applause
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aww,that is beautiful. She is really lucky to have you.
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Thanks. But I'm more lucky to have her. ^_^ Thank you for the comment
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