After I met you
I lost myself in the amidst you
You capture my pure heart
and take me to an extraordinary place
Where I need your air to breathe
and your presence to exist
Where a sweet sadness of longing
thirst for your anglic whisper
Aching your arms to hold me forever
and never let me go
To breathe with me
on the highest mountain
To fly with me in the sky
But this feeling I ask myself why
Only once in a lifetime
You can find someone to love
But it's only in my dream
you take me there....
Oh this feels like heaven
Please help me find myself back
If you find me before....
All I'm asking is love me
The way you I love you
A contest entry
- How Lost Are You? by Riftkin.
650 points, ended July 14, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I loved it. You don't need no criticism. You don't need to revise it. Its perfect the way it is. Your wonderful at writing poetry. Two thumbs on that one. Keep going on your awesome poetry. Perfect job.
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Great job. I loved this poem. You have a great love for poetry. Continue you on.
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Nice
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This is xc4llent. All I am asking is love me I can identify with this I said It at 5:30 a.m. And finally I get some where. I wish you luck. Thank you for sharing and I enjoyed reading.
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I repeatedly read this poem and enjoy its soft tone of love.
You make me recall those days when nothing else was important for me.I wished what you have wished in the last line here.
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Ah..my dear friend you are always melodious and wonderfu lwhile sharing your sweet sentiments.and that is the beauty of your impressive poetry...well done indeed...
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Hope the one you have written this for gets a chance to read it, as it fit my prompt and was a pleasure to read.
Best of luck to you.
Riftkin
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