you left in the morning
a night away
but more than enough time
for me to miss your presence
no one singing in the dining room
with headphones on and chatting to the dog
no one shouting baby or kitten up the stairs
grabbing my attention
the span of parting
reminds me
of what i have
& what is there with you
a night away to be with your family
- your brother's birthday
the sounds in our house are a solid reminder
of why you live here
Author notes
he's only gone for one night.. lololol and i miss him
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The marvel of simplicity.
I can practically hear the echo of emptiness.
And, of course, the specificity. There's no substitute for random detail when building authenticity, I think. Singing with headphones, brother's birthday.
I believe this poem.
Thanks for it.
Tom
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such is love, my friend... and i just love seeing it flowing so freely and beautifully from your pen
big
's to you, gilly
in the meantime.... think of the reunion...
~ Nicolette
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so beautiful Gill, i esp. love the closing lines too.
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sometimes 'apart' makes the appreciation of 'together' all the more profound.
I love reading your days.
Juls
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Aww. And here, what I wouldn't give for an empty house for awhile... lol.
Touchingly sweet, yet done without being over the top.
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the poem makes the reader feel the the special quiet a house, a life, takes on when the hum and vibration of the familiar become silent for a time. -silverfish
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Awww Very touching indeed! I think it's necessary for them to go away sometimes - that way we appreciate them even more
Good stuff and big swoons
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awww thank you so much >
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lol i understand it
you know i do
x
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yepp
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shhh
now go watch Torchwood
grab some tissues -
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lololol
okie dokie
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