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Attributes

The great debate of all mankind has since become a quest
They say that trust and love is blind but men prefer my breast

I don’t think they are very fair to make me feel undressed
The men I meet all gawk and stare with eyes upon my breast

I think that men are really cute and this I have confessed
There seems to be an absolute that they prefer my breast

I meet a guy and all the while I feel I’m being assessed
I don’t think it’s my clothing style he’s staring at my breast

I wish they’d gaze into my eyes and not look at my chest
I never try to advertise but men prefer my breast

I must admit I’m torn apart and yet I feel so blessed
Amera may not be too smart; at least I have my breast

 

 

 

Author notes

A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered chain of couplets, where each couplet is an independent poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of the first line. The Ghazal has a refrain of one to three words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that precedes the refrain. Lines 1 and 2, then every second line has this refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should refer to the authors pen-name...

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  • Peripatetic gold member
    July 26

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    Most boats are prized for many things besides the grace and beauty of their lines.
    But even so we love these first in most, like women's forms before their minds.

    For wisdom in a woman or a man, it's subtlety that best defines.
    The wiser ones are careful not to show or note distractions from their minds.

    As always you write with marvelous grace about this sensitive truth. Men are men and women are women, thank goodness, but a little respect goes a long way toward keeping us aware that we are human souls not just sanquine flesh.

    I would have been proud to have had this one in my contest "Does a Watched Girl Ever Boil?", but I suspect it will do quite well where it is!


  • Desire gold member
    July 16

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    Oh My Word~



    Well OO


    I am staring at the page to write my comment and ignoring your OO
    Even though I can't help but see it in front me- written in plain sight
    Love this ~
    You are Brilliant!!
    and Adore the form too

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • myrataal silver member
    July 15

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    You made me laugh out loud!

    I think you are really, really getting back at them here!

    Hahahahahahahaha.

    Btw. I feel like dancing every time I get to your page, or whenever you comment on my poetry. I wonder why?

    Love
    Myra


  • nordicsky silver member
    July 14

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    Oh no, I think I might have to plead guilty to this. I try to look into their beautiful eyes, the mirrors of their souls. I try to concentrate on the profound thoughts and ideas they may be expressing, but my gaze tends to wander down to their breasts.

    I am bad...bad...bad
    I am a poet.

    Love, Peter


  • PerVirtuous
    July 14

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    Where you used breast singular all throughout I was trying to figure if it was the left one or the right one. I think the left one is a tiny bit bigger, so I figured that was the one. Although, for the sake of variation, I considered that each use simply shifted sides. My eyes liked that image better, though still the slightly bigger one was indeed slightly more enticing. Then I realized, it is possible to look at both at the same time. Eureka! Problem solved! I think, however, I may have to inquire as to the color of your eyes. Three bunnies for you!


  • melphleg gold member
    July 14

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    I'm not staring at your breast. I'm not. That's because I'm a butt man myself. Actually, honestly, the first thing I notice is the face, then my eyes go below the neck.
    The poem and form are flawless. The repeating word, gives it an edge of humor.


  • DesolatELifE
    July 14
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    I didn't realise this was entered into this contest. Perfect!


  • pranj
    July 14

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    AMAZING!!!!!!!!
    Superb Ghazal...actually this form has been used extensively in hindi and urdu to express in metered rhyme the feeling of separation, pain and loss, after having read this I am in loss of words to explain how great your ingeniousness is!!

    after having read your stupendously witty and humorous piece something rather stupid came to my mind, I have written it bellow -
    One surely loves a lovely breast
    But what about the rest…?

    Yes, ones eyes they do arrest
    But that may not be the best!

    With a sexy body, and lovely eyes –
    You can surely be my guest…!

    Yes, with trust and love, blind as steaks –
    I would rather prefer the lovely breast!


    • Amera gold member
      July 14
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      LOL

      I thought you'd like a Ghazal in your contest and I knew you had a sense of humor. Thank you for the comment, the poem and the applause.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 13

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    No apology here... you got 'em I'm checkin' you out.
    Like your poetry, the beauty of your word strikes first, then the depth of meaning really gets me.

    ...and I read Playboy for the pictures and Scientific American for the articles.

    Wonderfu,l brilliant poem.

    Buddy


    • Amera gold member
      July 13
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      LOL, and you're honest about it!


      • Pure Thought silver member
        July 13
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        I could lie and BS and say other things, but that wouldn't be me...
        I'm up front about your out front... LOL


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 13

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    Very cute - very cute indeed. I am a leg man myself, but eyes are by far more important to me. Back lit Amber eyes or green eyes just slay me every time.

    good thing Gazelles and Zebras don't have green eyes or you'd have been a skinny Cubbie!

    love ya

    Dad


  • crivanea silver member
    July 13

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    lol!! HAHAH ..this is just too cute! lovelovelove this! I can always count on you to educate me on poetic forms..love where you take this..very creative!


  • SteveS gold member
    July 13

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    What eyes? Oh, yea....hi. I really like this form, which you have utilized so well to create this very fun and rhythmical poem.


  • kathrynguyrocks
    July 13
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    genius :]

    "amera may not be to smart"

    id beg to differ hahah


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    July 13

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    It's funny as hell and sometimes cleavage is the same as cash since guys will buy her drinks.

    Anyway, the form is new to me but it looks like fun to write. The rhymes and flow are great.

    Great job!


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    July 13

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    This was fun and full of breasts, what more could a guy ask for?!
    Better to have them and not need them then to need them and not have them...right?

    Always learning something from the Mistress of Form.

  • Papagallo
    July 13

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    well i do enjoy well- endowment. But I seek beautiful eyes, a sweet smile, be a bit more intelligent than me; as I love a challenge. Oh yes enjoy sex! Hey, I found her; so I am not looking. Now, a great poem here. A Ghazal is a bit tricky to write, Good lock in the contest!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 13

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    Now if this doesn't get you to the top of the popularity lists this week ...

    A superbly constructed Ghazal full of your very cheekiest and most charming wit

    Excellent

    Jeff

  • J Macabre gold member
    July 13

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    Your talking to the wrong kind of men then. As nice as a womans chest is to look at...they arent as interesting as her eyes or whats going on in her head.


  • Titus gold member
    July 13

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    Did I just read what I read? O! My dear, it's a pity I am short sighted then, will a pick-me-up do? Lovely write, I wondered where you were going with this, with the breast intentions! Nice one, Tony.


  • DesolatELifE
    July 13
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    Haha, very good indeed!


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    July 13

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    Bountiful-Uniquely-Creative-Profound...



    An ontologic picture of the mystery of the new Natal need for nourishment, which becomes an hypnotic trance stimulated by libidinal energy carried out through adulthood; and the reaction in this trance is masculine and feminine.

    I have enjoyed the reading of "Attributes".

    In admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

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