If only time was by our side
our souls might coincide
along the verdant boulevard somewhere;
from there to the home we would share,
there I would be your loving wife.
Waking each day to hear
the voice I know
that brings certainty to my life.
Your scent would be with me while I make
the first cup of our day;
breakfast upstairs would be shared on our tray.
Holding hands like braided flowers
out on our morning walk;
patiently I would absorb all that you have to say.
I wish to make our home your heaven,
a place where your fears are allayed,
putting you back together when you are broken.
And eagerly would I wait for you
each and every night; the promise
to be first in giving way should we fight.
In devotion if I must I would breathe for you,
carry all your pain away into the light.
I would bear and rear your children
in the worship of true Christian faith;
grow old with you while aches are more
and hair is lost in greying;
As darkness comes biding
I pledge you honest love from the purest spring.
Companionship I would always offer everlasting.
As clocks ticks down on who we are,
The cycle would end and we must go,
I will lay down by your side once more,
holding your hand again in love I will follow .
To be your hope and comfort for eternity
is my wish for you.
From the day we united in oneness from two...
Originally written on 22nd "May" 2007
© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan
Author notes
Two years ago My Wedding Vows i.e this piece of literature came into being...Thanks for being the reason...
r i n z u r a j a n
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Great wish
Nice experesion, love it!
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Not the type of poem I was looking for in order to put on my favourites list but I did enjoy this. Thank you for entering.
Sophie
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Wonderfully and beautifully written!
Thank you so much for sharing and for being part of this contest
I wish you the very best!!!
Many blessings,
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This is very sweet and beautiful. Thank you for the entry and good luck.
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I love how sweet and loving this poem is. Your devotion is so refreshing from the people I am around daily. Such lovely vows. My best wishes to you and your happiness. Thank you so much for entering and good luck.
~Betrayals *rose
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Very,very beautiful !!!!!!
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This was a really good piece that you have written here. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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This is sweet. So much love in here. Really, I'm stunned. You do very well with the emotional content. Great write and good luck.
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Awwww !
Beautiful and pure
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This is quite a good piece, you should be proud of the trophies you have received for it. Nicely done. best to you in the contest
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good job i love this.
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As clocks ticks down on who we are,
The cycle would end and we must go,
I will lay down by your side once more,
holding your hand again in love I will follow .
To be your hope and comfort for eternity
is my wish for you.
From the day we united in oneness from two...
this is such a beatuiful write.
I love the ending.
thank you for taking the time to enter,
best of luck.
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very sweet
it made me smile
well done!
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This is a very sweet poem. And a nice read. Great Job. the wrding was lovely. And the emtions in the poem was amazing. Really Nice Job. my favorite stanzas are:
If only time was by our side
our souls might coincide
along the verdant boulevard somewhere;
from there to the home we would share,
there I would be your loving wife.
Waking each day to hear
the voice I know
that brings certainty to my life.
Your scent would be with me while I make
the first cup of our day;
breakfast upstairs would be shared on our tray.
Holding hands like braided flowers
out on our morning walk;
patiently I would absorb all that you have to say
they are very nice and describe a love that is very strong. Good Work. And Good Luck in the contest!!!!!!!! -
This was very beautiful and touching. Please remember to include the title of the other poem in the contest you have commented on :0) Thank you..
As clocks ticks down on who we are,
The cycle would end and we must go,
I will lay down by your side once more,
holding your hand again in love I will follow .
To be your hope and comfort for eternity
is my wish for you.
From the day we united in oneness from two...
These were my favprite lines. People don't take marriage as seriously as it should be anymore. It isn't something you jump into or take for granted. It takes hard work and a lot of things for it to last.. Thank you for sharing and good luck in my contest :0) -
nice ^^ loved it thank you for sharing and entering.
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Hmm...
Wow, there are a lot more love poems then I expected. X3 Nice! I think it could've been condensed; some details weren't needed, but just me~
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Before I even got to the author notes I thought what beautiful vows these would be. Thank you for entering.
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Lovely idea: it's so very sweet, and a pleasure to read. There's some beautiful imagery as well ~
"Holding hands like braided flowers"
~ I found that absolutely enchanting.
Wonderful faith and devotion in this write. Also, I love the background
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very sweet. Not just that but emotional and romantic.
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So beautifully written from the heart!
Well done and thanks for your entry!
Jeremy0826
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