I see them all wandering
As we go around and around
step by step, red then white
They think to themselves
The past speaks so loudly
How will we we ever be heard?
Author notes
This spring I visited Boston, and the history of everything really struck as we saw places around the city. There is a brick path people can follow to sites that really mean something to the history of our country. It was unbelievable.
A contest entry
- Poetry Road by Cynthia Gaines.
1500 points, ended July 18, 2009, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Stupore Rounds -Prewrites- by rainbows..
400 points, ended August 19, 2009, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thank you again for your entry "The Red Walk" in my contest, "Poetry Road" (I still dislike this purple bkgrd- sorry). I've received so many awesome entries, that the contest closed early. I will begin judging soon, O' Most Wise Poet. Thanks again, and have a great day!! 
Peace,
Cyn
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sorry about the purple. I posted this in like a minute so i just let the backround be whatever it was.. i hope it is better now!
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It's all in the coloring of the contrasts, too. This page (not including the poem itself) really isn't appealing to me. The red is too bright, almost neon-like, and the colors don't mix well. But that's only my opinion. Thanks again for your entry, keep writing, Poet!!
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Thank you for entering your interesting poem in my contest. Firstly, I'd like to mention that I really love the phrase in the last two lines:
"The past speaks so loudly
How will we we ever be heard?"
Secondly, I really dislike the purple background. Although it's kinda cute, it's not my cuppa tea. It seems to clash with this poem, as "The Red Walk" speaks of a "red walk" and it really doesn't seem to fit the imagery in my mind. But other than that, your poem is very thought-provoking. Thanks again, and best wishes to you!!
Peace & Hugs,
xx Cyn xx
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sorry, but i agree with the other judges.
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Sorry, no.
I feel that this was rushed. The thoughts and structure to this was a good start, but I want to see more. Something with more metaphor and imagery. Good ideas float all around this. Hoping this doesn't offend. Good job, and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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