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In the Pool of Lost Souls

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 In the Pool of Lost Souls

 

She was coursed and now is cursed
with putrid soiled decay,
Her body floats in Satan’s moats
a price that she must pay.

The taste of bile become so vile
with piercing toxic grief;
the treachery of destiny
was borne from misbelief.

Insanity, impiety,
the lack of self respect;
has put her soul in his control
to pay for her neglect.

Her wretched scream is so extreme
that apparitions rise
and she shall sing with gurgling
there is no compromise.

 

 

 

Author notes

17 words from the Word bank:
Cursed, Putrid, Soiled, Decay, Satan, Vile, Piercing, Toxic, Grief. Treachery, Insanity, Impiety, Soul, Wretched, Scream, Apparition, Gurgling
Art work by: inextremo

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  • Bluemonday silver member
    September 12

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    Wow what a poem getting all the words in their correct perspective in rhyme and rhythm as well...Brilliant. Good luck in the comp...Dan


  • Frodofan silver member
    August 5

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    Very lovely. The words come so naturally in this. The form is perfect. Congrats on your winning!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    August 5

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    Amera, you've done it again! The internal rhyme is actually fun to read, despite this being a dark piece. Perfect! Thanks for following through on your commitment to enter the second round of this contest. It's a pleasure to read your work!


  • second-born
    July 26

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    wow...only a master could write this one!!! I love the flow...your internal rhymes are so good...they slid smoothly while I was reading this piece...and the subject is so intense...glad to read your work after sometime...God bless always!!!


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    July 22

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    dearest you have once more taken simple words and woven them into a melodious, dark and twisted picture. Great job!


  • The Accidental Poet
    July 14

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    Do you teach poetry? You seem to know a lot about structure and rhyme. I like this work, but..ahem... I think you meant MISBELIEF.

    The taste of bile become so vile
    with piercing toxic grief;
    the treachery of destiny
    was borne from misbelieve.


    • Amera gold member
      July 15
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      Thanks! I did mean "misbelief"
      I teach the Sestina here on AP and I have taught several poets here from the basics to sonnets.


  • penman gold member
    July 14

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    Excellent

    Love the inner rhyme and the masterful use of form. Such dark and powerful images portrayed. You did great as always. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Denerica
    July 13

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    Wow...wouldn't want to be there and have a heart for those in hope it would never be too late. Well done. Blessings.


  • Emmyb gold member
    July 13

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    your rhyming scheme is great in this piece. quite complicated when i review where the rhyme and syloboll repetitions are. great!! haha. and its in a creepy dark contest? well yes, it is a little dark to say the least.


    The taste of bile become so vile
    with piercing toxic grief;


    mmmmmm bile


    x


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 13

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    excellently dark and creepy, hmmmm that's what the judge is looking for, no fair!!!

    How can I compete with that


  • pranj
    July 13

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    How do you do it sooo well??

    I am quite astonished, the way you link the given words to say exactly what you mean! How do you do it? Do you write them down then ponder over them, or the verse just springs out? I can understand a quote or idea as a prompt - but words!! How DO you do it?
    anyways, as usual an engaging write...theres a certain internal rhyme - I like it! It has a nice effect! Overall an AWESOME write!


  • DesolatELifE
    July 13

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    Misbelieve or disbelief.. No no, misbelieve is perfect here.

    Bloody excellent. Extralongameter chopped in half. Very nice to read.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 13

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    Ahhh, you be a dark and twisted woman... and I love it.
    This not too good... it's three good. !!!


  • Faeryn
    July 12

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    Oh! This is super fun to read aloud! It has a certain sing-song ness to it. You had a work bank? Couldn't even tell. I love this. It's dark and the picture is really creepy and the rhyming is so wonderful.
    Love,
    Tay


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    July 12

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    impressive...this is dark...rhymes are perfect...you're limited by a word bank yet you still managed to write a great poem. this even has a bit of a poe vibe to it. i like it.

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