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i prefer your noises

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

with the exception of a neighborhood hum and buzz

           

               today was too quiet

 

 

which of course could mean many things--the long pause

of love--the stillness of bone --the laying down of body ---

the smell of mint and lavender perched silent on a breeze

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • EstherG
    November 22
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    So pretty...and a lovely contrast between the stillness of the first lines, their quietness, and the slow dreamy drift of the second part of the poem, especially the 'smell of mint and lavender perched silent on a breeze'.

    Just lovely.

  • luv2dream gold member
    September 13
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    i see why you got a gold...awesome poem! glad i found your poetry...will need to read more later sometime.


  • ccawley gold member
    September 13
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    I like your poetry!! Thanks for inviting me to your page! I'm still reading

    Strong imagery always pulls me in...


    • Cat gold member
      September 13
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      thank you so much! but how did i invite you?...


  • jantastic gold member
    September 8

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    I need to kick myself in the ass and keep up with reading you. I am never disappointed, ever. I need to read more period, but you, yes, definitely you. Maybe a marathon session is in order, if I can handle the emotion. I'm not expressing myself very well. I take it for granted sometimes that some people and their words are here. I just need to make the time. (remind me not to leave late night comments when I'm overtired and overworked...)



    • Cat gold member
      September 9
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      this is a huge compliment... thank you so much


  • Barry Hodges silver member
    September 5

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    You might well say thisnthis one ended just a little bit earlier than you thought it would and I would have to agree with that, wouldn't I? Yes. I would. Hic. Hic. Hic.

  • Cinnarry gold member
    July 25

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    "--the stillness of bone --"

    Those four words had me go back and read it all outloud. It came out so ethereal, like your words drifted around the sun on dandelion silks.

    I like it m.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 24
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    I love this....it is beautiful.

    Yours in Darkness
    Wayne Leon


  • sheltered
    July 23
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    a luring title...

    irregular image
    incising

    spectacular upheaval


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 23
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    this is so nice and somehow refined.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 21

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    Wonderful how you begin with the conclusion...and then unfold toward it in the poem. I particularly loved the last image...and that word PERCHED...it added a whole new sense of empty anticipation. These lines use seemingly (at first) unrelated images, put together.... different overlays...each one adding hue and partial emotion...but the compilation full and telling.

    Wonderfully done.


  • RainbowSky
    July 19
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    good job this twas brillllent


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    July 18

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    this had a haunting feel to it...except there is something tangible there, although, at the same time it seems to have gone missing. i don't know if that makes sense but after reading this I was just left with a sort of 'empty' or unfulfilled feeling.

    beautiful work.


  • Emmyb gold member
    July 18

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    Amazing. Absolutely brilliant. this is simplistic, not flashy or glittery just simple and straight forward and youve chosen some incredible images which a lot of people would not associate with silence. this is great you well it well. emmy


  • Swan song gold member
    July 18
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    I like esp thestillness of bone part

    good luck

    • Cat gold member
      July 18
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      thank you so much.. always appreciate your thoughts...


  • NoIQ gold member
    July 17

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    I am too long out of practice writing my thoughts re poetry and poems. I still read, but I no longer write very much, and as such I think I lack the proper perspective to accurately convey my thoughts. Here, the simplicity of the poem masques a significant emotional complexity, inasmuch as the thoughts are succint, but combine for a subtle, and yet more emotive, quality of peacefulness. I don't really know how to express the evocativeness I see in the words -- just trust me when I say that I can feel that it is there.


    • Cat gold member
      July 18
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      i am so glad to read your comment monte.. even when out
      of practice-- you still manage to say it perfectly


  • lunarlunacy
    July 16
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    exquisite !


  • Daizee silver member
    July 16
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    perched silent on a breeze.. deliciously put.


  • myrataal silver member
    July 15

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    Beautiful in its simplicity ...

    and the unsung poetry swaying in each pause ...



    Love
    Myra


  • milkdrop
    July 15
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    beautifully ephemeral... i love the delicate poise of the last line


  • Cannonsfire
    July 13

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    a scent perched on the end of our noses i think, no matter if our eyes are closed that special someone tends to be felt even without them being that close to touch C


  • Daniela Violin silver member
    July 13

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    I live alone right now so I tend to agree with you but it depends what noises they are LOL, loved this.


  • Balldinger silver member
    July 13

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    Turn it up...!

    how close is this to the midway point of persistence? sounds like the wanton need of something more special; something more full of feel and sense; something more complete than a simple imposition..


  • girl shaman
    July 13

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    so elegant! that's all i can say, and really this was the most powerful bit of words i have read so far this week! my goodness i love your work <3

    • Cat gold member
      July 13
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      what a kind comment.. thank you so much


  • yoopea
    July 13

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    i love the sound of cat as she perches precariously upon the winds of her words. it's as if each image is made of glass- fragile, beautiful. hold them delicately in your paws and you feel the poems course through your fur with sparkling clarity.


    couldn't resist the cat references. yes, i am a cheeseball. but i prefer to call myself a poet, haha :-)


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 13

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    i love how you are able to mesh such a wonderful conversational voice & tone in your poems with a more poetic feel & beautiful imagery. this is gorgeous Mary, i love reading the moments & feelings in life that you write about.


  • jazzcat gold member
    July 13

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    Wonderful descriptions that evoke feelings and memories -- I like the way the title is such a part of the piece. So much to like about this, including the brevity and the overall tone. Well done! Good luck in the contest!


  • Namita
    July 13

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    beautiful and so quietly this falls into the reader's mind and just stays there soft, sensuous uses of sound...i love the "stillness of bone"

    namita


  • NurseChilly gold member
    July 13

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    it's the small things that make it big - yes
    the small sighs and the innocent scents of romance and love
    beautimous!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 13
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    Smells perched on breezes, how wonderful.


  • cubert
    July 13

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    I totally dig it, especially the way it kind of trails off and lets my mind add on to the end. lovely, and good luck in the contest


  • charcoal
    July 13
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    beautiful


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 12

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    "the stillness of bone"

    So much, in so few words. This is already a classic. Good luck in the contest.




  • AJ Morelli gold member
    July 12
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    how pretty this is...



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