two faces
under the bridge--
mine and the sun's
Andrew Hide
24~03~2004
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Written March 24th, 2004
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lovely poem,wounderful imaginary, about shades under the bridge, sun I like a hole lot! take care
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This inspired me. I think I will be able to get a haiku out of that inspiration
Excellent again!
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Love, love, love this! Imagine: a day passing by; a life passing by: water under the bridge. Now: a small correction, perhaps? Apostrophe? sun's?
= endearment 
Myra -
AH,
This is cute.
Aimee xo
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oh, I love this. I think sometimes just a few lines can have much more impact than a long or elaborate piece. This is a wonderful image.. makes me think of warm days and spring
~Scarlet -
excellent
Oh so lovely poem. Simple and deep, a bit like the water under the bridge. Thanks for sharing. -
Entertaining
Hi Andrew:
Keep on smiling. Here I thought my Feathered Horn was silly. We are not going to get in a competition to see who can write the silliest Haiku. I did enjoy yours though. Thanks. Bill -
ah.... I see.... read your explanation.... I think the word "under" is what throws this for a loop a bit..... I had a really different image with you underneath the bridge with the sun setting in view.... you looking at it and it at you. Now with the pond reflection.... hmmmmm I wonder if there is a crisper way to produce the image..... where the reader snaps it up.....? Anyway, always a pleasure to read your fine work.
Don -
Loved it!!!!! That's all I have to say.
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No matter chasing grey clouds or the sun this haiku brings at least that sunny feeling everyone is anxious waiting for. Seems you were lucky enough to see him also.
nice writ Andrew
oh and on the background a face is a dream (Kings singers)
Edited on Mar 24, 3:33 p.m. because ''. -
lol...I love the three billy goats gruff.
In all honesty, I was on top of the bridge looking over the edge, in the water was my reflection with the sun on my shoulder. But I'm sure I could hear 'who's that trip trapping on my bridge.'
Andrew -
very good
I can not help when reading this to wonder why you are under the bridge. Immediately 3 billy goats gruff come to mind but surely that is not it as your poem speaks more of comfort. Now I have a quandry upon which to spend my day.
Well written
John -
lol the sun, it's not around here mate, those skies out there are greyer than my ashtray seriously though, a good little haiku
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Yeah that would be nice.... There is this really cool park here in Portland called Cathedral Park... It sits under this huge bridge and the supports look like gothic cathedral supports, like the spines of an arch. It is really kind of cool... There is jazz there during the summer... thanks for giving me something to look forward to... Susan
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