Let him feel the warmth of my skin
Let him know that I love him.
Let him know that I care.
Let him remember that I am there.
Let him know that I’m his forever.
Let him know that it’s through all weather,
Let him see me in the stars at night.
Let him feel me in the rain so light.
Let him smile when he see’s my face.
Let him feel my heart race
Let him sigh when he thinks of me
But above all else, let him be free.
Don’t tell him how much I cry at night,
When the latest speech became the latest fight
Don’t tell him how much I miss him so
When my head says “stop” and my heart says “no”.
Don’t tell him that he’s not out of my head,
Because if he left now I think I’d be dead.
But above all else, don’t tell him of the rush I get,
When I sing of him, think of him, lest I forget.
Don’t tell him how I still love him so,
Because I adore him enough to just let him go.
Author notes
taken from personal experience, and please remember that this was a hurtful experience when commenting...
the rhyming couplets weren't my original choice, but i thought the emotions involved needed something simple and effective.
my first poem on here, so any constructive critisism would be helpful.
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some of the rhymes are a little odd, so do you think i need to replace any lines, and why?
Comments
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Repititive but good. I enjoyed reading this. It was well written. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.
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I love it the rhymes should flow around the meaning not the meaning around the rhymes. What you have works! This is very relatable to many people I connected with this poem on a very personal level. Beautifully done! Best of luck!
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this..is a very well written poem, and also a very relatabe piece for me. i love the way it flows, and the feeling you get reading each line. i understand what a painful experience this is, because i have had to go through what you're writing about..letting go of the person you love the most, even tho you still love them and always will. beautiful write. stay strong.
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thank you very much.it is painful, and its nice to know that there is someone who gets what i mean. Thanks For Commenting.
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