Your sorrow bleeds into mine
Memories merge, and turn to muddy shades
Like paintings spoiled by angry children
Mix it all together
Purple into black and blue
Bruises on a wounded soul
Do not clean the brushes of bitterness
Let the world see
Let them see the tear stained past
Let them weep....
Let them now bear the shame of their blindness
Scribbles and swirls of bleeding beggars
Oh how we begged, you and I and ,and too many others
Abandoned blots, on the snowdrift landscape of society
Black Blemishes in pigtails
Broken little boys afraid to grow
They washed us away
Washed their hands of us
And the colours of our souls went down the drain
With the guilt,,, secrets swilled away
And your sorrow bleeds into mine
And mine is merged with yours
And his,,, and hers,,and theirs
And The tears of babies still to weep
Into the deafness,
They fall through the ribcage of my carcase
Where the maggots of apathy
Devoured dignity
And drip into the puddles of our failed humanity
Author notes
How many times will people turn away from the obvious
This is for all of those whos sorrow seeps into mine
Its time to stand up and say enough
http://open.spotify.com/artist/4phGZZrJZRo4ElhRtViYdl
Thankyou
T
A contest entry
- hurt. by Lauren Noir.
1300 points, ended August 15, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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amazing poem darlin,so powerful,so darkyou are amazing darlin,wow
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The power and message of your poem blows me away, and takes my breath away. This kind of pain hits very close to home with me, and my heart aches deeply for you. Thanks for sharing and giving a voice to all those who do not have one. My best to you. Blessings, Patty
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thankyou...this one is personal...its time the world woke up and said enough...i send u much love and warmth
T
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speechless here, and that is rare of me
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this was amazing. i really like your style. the way you phrase each stanza is brilliant. it's been a while since ive read anything at all, and for this to be one of my first reads in over a month. i was practically overwhelmed with for lack of better terms, darkness, of it. but i can assure you, that is not a bad thing. i think that reading this kind of got me wanting to write again. excellent write; never stop.
Rob
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oh my goodness...thankyou so very much...this poem is very close to my heart
and your comments truly moved me...cant wait now to return the favour
T
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Very nice, it shows potential, so well done. Thank you very much for entering.
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A hush falls over the crowd in this write. Very powerful message! and your words are just clever and raw. No, tell us how you really feel..
Awesome.
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thanks....this one is raw..ell cos its raw,,here in poetry land, as we develope as writers and hopefully friends we begin to realise that many of us merge and absorbe each other, so this ones speaks for a good many muddy puddles i guess lol
catch a hug
T
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hmmm
Ive got a poem you should read Its sort of the same line of though but a much darker look at it, oh and lol this is an awesome poem btw Im not usually a fan of non rhyming poems even though i do em from time to time but this was excellent. heres a link to the one i was talkin about
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5292251
i wrote it when i was a teenager though just so ya know
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Thankyou, for your lovely comment, this one is personal to me, so your comments mean a great deal
T
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They will continue to turn away so long as doing so does not affect their lives. It sometimes takes a tragedy closer to home before they can understand that we are all truly connected. Any difference at all, any action taken, is far better than to have done nothing at all. Sometimes it is not a bad thing to use the not-very-subtle threat to make those around you understand that -it is enough!
Excellent write T, strong images, well placed.
Peace
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Thanks Michael
seems silence is almost always the easier option
yeah the not so subtle threats,,in the end thats how my dad stopped hurting the next generation,, split up an entire family,but he knew beyond doubt that he would not harm my nieces as he harmed us
thanks Michael, im sending you big hugs
T
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You are welcome. As you know, I'm pretty good with the "not so subtle threat" thing. We had to do the take a stand thing with a cousin and make it clear history would not repeat itself...not my daughters, I'll go to prison and your mother will cry.
Peace
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Bloody Powerful Work!
This is probably one of the most powerful and thought invoking pieces I think that I have had the pleasure of reading since coming to AP. You beautifully described the pain that we as a human race share and have in common and ask probably the most important question of all, that being when are we going to stop being so callous toward one another and realize that in order for us to continue to thrive, we must make a conscious effort to be there for other people.
FANTASTIC WORK!!!
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Thankyou,,, so very very much
thats a real compliment coming from such a fine poet,,, and this piece is personal to me,, and so it means a lot
thanks
T
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this is heart rendering! you have penned a very deep and emotion piece
and it is very effective! i am so glad you shared this write with us,
Blessings always
Rend
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Thanks for the very thougtful comment
much appreciated, lol, this was a very red wine day for me
Thanks for making time to stop by and comment
T
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turning away is so easy, unless you have been or sympathise with a victim it doesn't seem to cross the concience of another. why? a bitter world awaiting a bitter end, maybe.
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ITS TRUE
there are way too many victims of failed humanity out there,,,,makes my skin crawl
a couple of years ago,, during my work with a family, i met a hild who was beaten daily, even the authorities turned a blind eye....why? apathy, fear,, laziness?
guess ill never know,,, the result is always the same tho,,, another broken spirit
kk the crazy lady should stop right
thanks hun for a great comment
T
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A beautiful piece of poetry, but I feel it is a peek into a troubled and bruised childhood. People don't want to get involved because of fear of the truth. It's easier to look straight through the problem. Many times those who do stand up to be heard become labeled a "problem". You're not alone sweetheart, many of us have been the pigtails or the broken little boy but somehow we survived it. It made me tough and you sweet. You are such a sweet soul my friend. Keep moving forward.
Ric
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thankyou ric for taking time to comment
Dnt worry bout me..... I been drinkin too much red wine lately n not the cyber stuff, dkw, just everything snowballed for a bit,,, stuff thats been neatly filed under c for crap for so many years jut fell outof the closet.... I stuffed it all back in now, its in a mess.... but ill tidy it up later lol
truthflly... im okay right now... catch a big hug my friend... and thanks
for being a friend when I needed one badly
T
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just wow. amazing. truly and completely. brilliant job.
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Oh wow, this is a blood chilling write. Your ending was so powerful and the subject you wrote about is one of many overlooked. God bless.
Love
~Noor
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Excellent
Incredible the suffering we inflict and the way in which we deny it....
Powerful lines at the end.
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ooooh ure pics back yayyyyyy lol
thanks michael, much appreciated this one is intensly personal, so comments from aps finest new poet are much appreciated
T
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Excellent
WOW ! what a metorphoric masterpiece of imagery "And the tears
of babies still weep into the deafness" wonderful stuff you did a good job on this one.My latest is a happy one for children
called"Make Believe Land" hope you like it....George...
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Wow! You have come a long way friend, this is powerful, imagery is awesome. I love the title, I love everything about this poem. An amazing job you've done here, and you should enter it in a contest for I feel you have a good chance of taking out the big one, provided of cause it fits. So deep and with a lot to think about. Thanks for sharing and take good care my friend.
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Excellent!
Oh, you have penned a great piece here. I love the imagery used to unveil the ugliness of ignorance and deafness to the suffering of others.
"secrets swilled away" "Where the maggots of apathy
Devoured dignity" Truly strong and great lines!
I have really missed reading you!!
K
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wwow T this is deep and unlike you its brilliant tho i bleed into you and we are all mixed colours its dark but can be light also sometimes i think im a maggot lol when i look down there love ya hun xo
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YUP, YOU ARE INDEED ONE OF THE SOULS WHOS COLOURS MIX WITH MINE, NEVER A MAGGOT HUN, THEY ARE THE MAGGOTS REMEMBER THAT OKAY??
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Wow.Dark poem..So many messager intertwined into one..I need to injest this for a bit..Give me some time..I will get back,,,...Count on it
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