hold me fast, in black and white
in avalanche and storm
in seagull form
shield me from the rocks of age
the demons at the bedroom door
the snarls of ordered life
sport with me, play tag between
the tired hearts of parents
the books of myth and man
bathe me on the splitting beach
upon the shells, between the shapes
along the skyline, always
brush me with the crayons of leaf
of grass and strips of summer blue
colour me against the cuts of autumn
warm me, and having worn me out with trust
replenish with a waxing smile
our catalogue of growing hours
where fingers guided us when young
let lips, unstained, increase this song
this melody of soft triumphant eyes
love me and, against the fall from outworn grace,
I will raise this ragged flag
and never bend my knee
Author notes
Contest Prompt:
Inspired by Sigur Ros: višrar vel til loftįrįsa (Good weather for airstrikes)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=akYuy2FMQk4&feature=channel
A contest entry
- Sigur Ros by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
650 points, ended July 19, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the metaphors in this poem and think it provokes a lot of artistic and intricate thought. Thank you for this great entry.
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Sigur Ross = amazing.
And so is this!! I especially love the last three lines. They're simply the perfect close to such an impressive piece of writing. Thanks for sharing this!
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What a powerful write. I really liked it a lot.
brush me with the crayon of leaf
of grass and strips of summer blue
colour me against the cuts of autumn
I got the feeling of freedom and wonder when I read these word.If only there was someone to surround you with this much care and love.
You have penned a beautiful poem well done poet .
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The poem was inspired by a song - follow the link in the author notes. There was someone to love!
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I am not sure I truly understand this poem, I thought it was about you taking a stand against something. but whatever I liked your creativity and the talent it took to write this poe
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understanding
click on the link in the author notes - and all is revealed!
Thanks for your kind comments,
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hmm. I thought you were going to have a rhyme scheme in there. But that was only the first stanza I suppose.
Great job. Lovely imagry : )
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WOW! I absolutely love it! It's so passionate. Your imagery is simply incredible. This is really a beautiful poem. GREAT write!
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great!
that's really a perfect poem - you explain very well the thought's of yours.. great! -
Excellent
'tis a very fine write, indeed. You seem to have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Again, well done.
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great
I liked this lines very much:
bathe me on the splitting beach
upon the shells, between the shapes
along the skyline, always
brush me with the crayons of leaf
of grass and strips of summer blue
colour me against the cuts of autumn
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I very much like your closing three stanzas.
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I especially liked your last four stanzas, since Autumn has always been my favorite season...& in the Autumn of my own existence, I have discovered the purity of such a love. Good luck in the contest, Scribe.
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Wow! Fantastic!
This part really got me------------------> "bathe me on the splitting beach
upon the shells, between the shapes
along the skyline, always"
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