Bodies strapped to rusted metal gurneys move along a metal track...
Upright and in place, they are ready for their skulls to crack...
Bloodied automated bolt gun lowers into place...
It moves and positions, shooting a bolt into their face...
Blood gushes from the wound, next one in line...
Body moved then flipped over,down comes a power saw to cut out the spine...
Blood covering already filth caked floor...
The large vertical wound looks awfully sore...
Flip over,blood glopping,further down the tracks...
Larger saw emerges and lowers,away at the body it hacks...
Gurney moves upright and dumps into the chute...
Severed parts slide down, blood in pursuit...
The remains here are in mass accumulation...
After the process of automated mutilation.
In a list
A contest entry
- Favourites only. Give me your prewrites x by moaner.
575 points, ended August 11, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Awesome!!!
This truely was a good piece of work. I salute you!
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umm i Think I Pee'd on myself a lil.
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Ok I think I am in a strange frame of mind. This poem actually forced a maniacal giggle out of me. Perhaps it was the meter, almost sing-song. The line "The large vertical wound looks awfully sore..." kinda tickled me and I am not sure that is the reaction I should have had. Anyway...The imagery is vivid and the last lines actually really hammer home the content of the poem.
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I love this. Reminds me of an old nightmare. Chilling.
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love the language and new gore tools! a very strong piece. i like this lots xxx
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this one definitely had my stomach on knots and turning with disgust but you do it so effortlessly and so perfectly its almost scary
you are a master of macabre!
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oh my god this poem is disgusting. i love it. you never fail to impress me. i can see why life reaper likes your work so much.
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This is horror at its finest
Now this one takes the cake John, this was really discriptive and hard for me to read, I guess you did a wonderful job. I think this is one of your best work. The visuals made me feel as though I was right there. Sick John. lol. lots of love.
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J dear one, this is so well penned from the mind of a man that sends chills.. the words flow like fluid from the corps and tells the story of gruesome though of mutilation the process well brought
Hugs always Angel♥
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I'm glad to see youre back and better then ever.
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on this one i feel my spine being torn out,thats probably because of the back surgery though,great write bro,looking forward to a lot more.
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this is awesome with the rhythme and the rhyme is ace!! Welldone on this I just love the imagery and gore!! Your backs and back you shall stay --- J we've missed you whilst you've been away
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in the darkness
Mutilation back for revenge....
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I can not read your work when i first wake and am eating breakfast was not a wise choice so i hope thats a big compliment right there if you are getting the drift of it all!!!!!! Amazing sick and twisted and really freaked me out here in thios piece sent chills through all together top to bottom well done a great write
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twisted
fucking sick... i love it. -T
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