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Reflection

I can see myself.
I can see my reflection.
I step into the pond.
I break the water.
Now I only see ripples.
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  • NotSoClueless17
    September 4

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    I get the idea here but would sugest that you put something other than "I" for the first word in each line its a good poem otherwise if you get what I'm saying message me.

    P.S. please don't return the favor and coment one of my poems unless you want to.


  • Palas Kumar Ray
    July 30

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    True we can see ourself only when we are very calm in ourselves.
    If we are put into the turmoil we can not. perhaps you didn't mean it but I feel it this way.You have a Very poetic mind

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    July 12
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    great

    lol. Cute poem. Simple and enjoyable.
    I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.
    Brian


  • Draggiegurl
    July 11
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    I love doing tankas they're like my alltime favorite style of poetry!