An old city bar;
The neons buzz gently in the window
As your face sinks lower into the dirty floor.
Grime seeps into my fingertips as I
Whisper forbidding words in your ear.
Seconds tick by with the power of an
Indie driver who missed a dose of Ritalin.
Glancing at the door, I know what you
Have to do. I just wish you didn't have to.
Don't get me wrong;
I'm so proud of you. So.damn.proud.
You're fighting for something I don't
Even believe in [our country] & I
Wish I had the strength to go, too.
I wish you didn't have to be alone
All the smoltering nights out there.
Alone.
Don't get me wrong;
I love you. I love you. I LOVE YOU.
I love the courage you're showing
& the dedication you're putting
Into this. I love you.
I'm going to miss you.
PS. Please write♥
Author notes
This is a way different style than what I'm used to. Please forgive me.
A contest entry
- Honor our Soldiers by ladybug..
3100 points, ended July 14, 29 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Great job! Congrats on the gold!
It really addressed the fact we can be proud of our loved ones without having to defend the war.
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Poet
A fine write. Deep and will thought out. We can defer in our politics but still appreciate good poetry. I support my country and those brave troops . As a whole I look at the entire world and weep.Congrads on the Gold.
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Now, this, I so liked because ... you showed a part of someone who, [like me] doesn't support war, and, seemingly, doesn't take part in pride - yet can bring themselves to support the ones they LOVE and accept what they have to do ... This was written very hoenstly, I feel - and I could identify so much with it, which made me enjoy it all the more.
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I really like this. It's a really different style than anything I've ever really read & it has the sort of dirty pretty feel to it, yet in freeverse? Weird. Anyways, my favourite part was:
"Don't get me wrong;
I'm so proud of you. So.damn.proud.
You're fighting for something I don't
Even believe in [our country] & I
Wish I had the strength to go, too.
I wish you didn't have to be alone
All the smoltering nights out there."
That is definitely the part I knew this was about a soldier. Thanks so much for sharing!
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