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Innocence

A lightning bolt hits the ground,

A young child cries but there is not a sound.

 

Rain pours from the sky,

Misery and blood fly.

 

An innocence lost,

A childhood tossed.

 

The face burns into the childs mind,

Her heart she can no longer find.

 

The man holds up a long blade,

A nice dark hole in a little girl's heart is made.

 

The child begins to dream,

Of candy land and things.

 

Drifting off without a worry,

She prays one day this man will be sorry.

 

I'm standing over you,

Only you have no clue.

 

My face rotted and dead,

Peeling off and falling on your bed.

 

Dose it make you feel better to rape and kill?

Soon it will be your face that lay upon that grill.

 

I said I'd make you sorry,

This is not going to be one big party.

 

To you I am a ghost of your past,

Honey, you had better start running, and fast.

 

I'm here to repay you for what you have done,

For me this will be tons of fun.

 

One whack and you are out like a light,

Now your smile is not so bright.

 

My only desire was to make you feel,

To watch your flesh burn and peel.

 

 

 

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  • Wonderful write, writer.

    Good luck in the contest.

  • Whoa, enough contests here? Good poem and everything but.. I'm not willing to give a fair review to a poem in 16 contests.

  • This reminds me of a song called "electrical storm" by the glorious U2.

    "A young child cries but there is not a sound."
    A nice dramatic, but equally as important line to your poem.
    Thank you for entering.
    Sophie

  • very nice rhyme there sounded great thanks for entering

  • My opinion is that the sensitive nature of the issues raised in the write get lost with the rhyming. That is just my opinion though and I'd like to thank you for entering and say best wishes to you .

  • i'm not certain how this applies to my contest, howver it is a intresting poem.Thank You for entering, and for expressing such sensentive emtional thoughts and good luck

  • Very nicely done. I love the story behind the rage. Great job on imagery also. It was excellent. Thanks so much for entering. And good luck! You did a good job. ((:


  • Jayde1
    July 13

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    good

    well done
    this is very good
    nice rhyme


    The child begins to dream,

    Of candy land and things.


    good stuf

    good luck


  • darkyinsoul
    July 12
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    Good rhyme
    tis deep
    thanks for entering our contest
    Good luck to you
    Darky


  • cazzy71
    July 12
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    am welling up

    The tears are welling up.This is beautiful.


  • Dpoeticone
    July 11

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    This was good, i liked it alot. i got really into this poem, at first it was about to make me cry..im sensitive lol but than it kind of made me weirded out, with her talking about the face an flesh in the bed, but that was my fav part lol "My face rottin and dead,

    Peeling off and falling on your bed." I dont know why but i liked that it creeped me out, cause poetry is suppose to pull out emotions, an thats why i like to write an read it. it was dark..which was tha point , but hey i liked it ..lol But i felt you really delivered an did a good job :-)

    • thank you very much, i just hope people in the contests see that lol thanks tho, it kinda creeped me out while i was writting it too lol

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