Contorted forms of linguistic phrase,
Pieced and matched in particular ways.
Thrown about and scattered like the stars above,
Descriptive of things such as hatred and love.
Alphabetical acrobats in specific ways folded,
As if lingual artists have sculpted and molded.
Hammered together in particular fashion,
Bringing to light a new idea or passion.
Phonetic projectiles aimed at one single objective;
Mapping out thought to put into perspective.
Pieced together in an orderly formation,
Traveling toward their literary destination.
Syllables scribed in forms new and old,
Assembled just right helping sentiments be told.
Thrown down like a verbal game of jacks,
Laid upon one another like potatoes in sacks.
Consonants placed amidst vowels in synchronic style,
Aiding one another in ways versatile.
Squeezed collectively into harmonious verse,
Assisting us as we communicate and converse.
Author notes
K E I T H E. G E R B E R
We spend so much time with words that I thought I would write about what we do with them.
A contest entry
- Make me smile by XxLuckyxX.
1350 points, ended August 18, 37 entries
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What did you think
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This is amazing and so clever. We do use words all the time and generally we forget their basemetal as it were. This is a great piece. Words about words. I really enjoyed this thank you for entering my contest. Good luck.
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I sincerely enjoyed reading this piece. I think you did a wonderful job here. I love how you took something we all love to do, writing, and wrote such an amazing piece on it. I think the flow was awesome and your rhymes were perfect, adding a great rhythm to the poem. I love the light hearted nature of the piece as well. I think this is truly a wonderful write and I am so glad to have had the pleasure of reading it. Thank you so much for this wonderful entry. Best of luck in the contest.
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Cute,
I enjoyed your poem because it speaks of truth and yet its fun and playful. You did a fantastic job. I don't think I have ever seen someone play with words like that and come out with such a wonderful piece of art. Your rhyme is flawless. Thanks for sharing.
*~*Night Mistress 1*~*
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Yes! Nice choice! its keeps with melodic flow and meter. Great job!
xo
Cyb -
I never noticed that and it bothered me once you pointed it out thank you.
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Absolutely Awesome Alliteration!
I liked this piece..
The alliteration was wonderful and original...
Alphabetical acrobats
Phonetic projectiles
Syllables scribed
synchronic style
The only thing that hung me up was the reuse of the word specific...
Pieced and matched in specific ways.
(then again a few lines down)
Alphabetical acrobats in specific ways folded
They are great lines but perhaps a different word choice for one of those entries... maybe 'Certain'? There was a massive buffet of vocab here and that repetitive placing just stuck out like a thumb. Hope this help!
xo
Cyb
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This is beautiful! You commented on a free verse poem of mine and I rarely write tfree verse (I'm awful at it). This is much more my style; the rhyme in this piece adds depth and emotion. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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I do like it better this way, left allign was a great idea thank you so much. I do like the one color background here too. Thank you for the suggestions Mr. White Stone.
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Thanks I will try the left allign and solid background, I appreciate your input highly.
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I like the images and metaphors running into one another like this... as you perhaps noticed while reading my work. Deep and profound message here, well written. The only thing I would change is maybe going for left align instead of center. I find it easier to read, and I would put a solid color bg on it as to not detract from the weight of the words with attention to the space around it. I make my own bg's that I use for lighthearted poems, but poems like this, never.
Also, I think that "synchronistic" would flow better than "synchronic" although that's really a matter of taste I guess. Overall I enjoyed the write and it's message.
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Hey stoner you still tryin to make a comment record? Silly ninja.. you won't be able to post poems if your fingers fall off nerd!
xo
cyb -
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