I remember
That summer evening
You promised-
You’d never leave
But they’re just words
That got crushed by reality
I sat around every corner
Befriending dust particles
Thinking my stars wouldn’t shine
Anymore
Memories like maple syrup
Taste like oxidized lollipops
Everything sweet
Sting the tips of my tongue
I stopped believing
That maybe; just maybe I could get up
And step out of this vortex
That’s slowly slicing my heart
Then I look back
At torn pictures held together by tape
And realize-
I forgot how to smile like I used to
I don’t recognize-
The bubbly sound of laughter
It isn’t worth losing myself because
Blue skies turned grey for a second
So I’m breaking the chains
And learning to fly
Author notes
8.http://www.deviantart.com/print/319171/
A contest entry
- PICTURE PROMPT BABY(FIRST CONTEST) by Dpoeticone.
800 points, ended August 23, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow! No wonder you got bronze.. this is an amazing piece of writing right here! Wish i could write like that! Its amazingg!
Keep writing (:
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This is so good, I really really liked this poem, I feel that it had a lot of good metaphors, and that the format really made it easy to read and understand, and just go with the flow of it, its one of those you wanna read twice, it was really good
good luck :-) -
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um but wat option did u choose
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great poem,,,, i love how its a picture promt thing,,, but yet it sounds real,,, it sound like u took out the emotion in the picture and replaced it with emotions u liked( that turned out really great) LOL love the poem,,, hope u understand what i mean,,, if not than all im saying is that ur awsome at writing and keep it up
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I really like this, how you took the picture and sort of thought up a story for it, i really felt the emotion and loved your word choice. Thanks for entering :]
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wow. so amazed by the very beauty of this poem
definietely a winner
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Wow how can a cheerful girl write so dark lol
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Aw, great poem! Really inspiring.
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thats so sad but great. i can really feel it
its amazing
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