I captivate your glance upon mine,
looking into one another's mind,
wondering if we are alone,
or are they among us
this very moment?
They are not visible to me,
nor can I hear their silent voices
calling out your name;
as you do.
I can not share them with you.
Allowed I am not.
They are attached to you,
as I am.
My purpose is to protect you,
their goal is to render you helpless..
They are winning...
I am dying...
Hopeful I remain, my angel.
I desire to expel them
from your entity forever,
inhaling them into my own blemished soul.
I invite them to abduct me instead,
affording you your freedom..
And mine...
Your affliction evolves in me as well;
you need to know this, Baby.
I wonder what you see
as you stare ahead,
or what do they allow you to see.
I hope you can see me in this picture.
Can you find me?...
Or are you lost forever,
as I would be?...
My sweet little girl;
bathe yourself in my tears,
accepting them
to cleanse the fear
dwelling within you.
I will not give in to them,
nor will you.
Together we will overcome,
united we will remain.
You will never break away
from my embrace,
they have no hold on you,
and no right...
The Lord is the only voice
you will hear, along with mine.
This is my promise to you...
We are one, bound together
and they know it...
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I have read quite a few articles over the years on this very subject, as well as having seen numerous movies about the disorder, too. It must be such a horribly disabling event in their lives, as well as their family's lives. I think many mental illnesses are largely caused by a chemical imbalance in the brain, but as for multiple personality disorders, I think it often arises from suppression of traumas. Evocative piece, Poet. Such a serious subject. It's good that you show your solidarity within your words. 
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Another wonderfully touching poem-your narrative is so engaging, it makes the reader really feel what you are feeling, a pleasure to read.
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brutal and raw....your understanding of your 'baby' is immense and insatiable. true loves embrace ---fearless---true.....impressive..bravo
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Thank you so much.This poem is about multiple personalities.One of my friends has a daughter who is going through this..I wanted to let her know thai it must be a painfull experience to go through this .Thank you again..I appreciate it so much
John
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very nicely written. I like the whole thing except the part about the Lord because I do not share that sentiment. But that is my feelings. The rest of the poem is great. I like the sentiment that she will hear only your voice that is sweet. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank yiu so much
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This is a really moving and heartbreaking write done with great skill
i enjoyed iy very much
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You are so kind
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oh my gosh, this is filled with such anguish as well as hope. Super powerful write, very nice work
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Mesmerised by your words I find myself thinking about spirits that only some see and others don't see, I find myself thinking about ghosts or voices that are in the mind. Also there is the added influence of someone supportive who helps another. Very very good.
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I appreciate your comments
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Heartfelt and strong
I thought of a particular circumstance as I read this, and after seeing other reviews, I am certain that I understood why you wrote it, and what your message was. it is very heartfelt and full with hope and encouragement, offered to one who needs both. I loved the intensity of your words. Lots to consider and chew on.
There are a few things that need attention:
Hopefull ==> Hopeful
expell ==> expel
cleans the fear ==> cleanse
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Thank you for your kind comments, and pointing out my spelling errors
John
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you write with such passion and conviction. your wisdom is conveyed in each and every line. i found this write particularly stunning. may you find the peace you deserve and until then- the coping skills it takes to make it through...return the favor? thank you!
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5319693
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Thsnk you for your generous comments
John
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An Emotionally Charged Write!
I am in tears John because there is no doubt in my mind that this is written either because you were inspired by "Opaque Delusions" or because you were thinking about a conversation that we have had. Now if my gut feeling is wrong then I have to tell you that it fits the bill anyway and has touched me like you cannot imagine. You have no idea how many times I have said these very words, have prayed these very prayers, have asked God to please let it be me instead of her. How many times I tell her to just please always know that no matter how many she sees to always know that I am still somewhere in that crowd ready to rescue her. Oh, God, I am crying so hard right now, bawling in fact. I have never had a poem cause such an emotional outburst such as this. I am having real difficulty writing this but I keep wiping and typing because I want you to know just how deeply this has effected me. This is one powerful piece rather or not it has been written based on my assumptions! You could not have described our situation any better if you were living in our household, I think that is what amazes me the most here. You have been such an incredible friend, have listened to my woes and it is so obvious here through your translation of them through poetry. I am so touched right now that I can't hardly breathe beyond my tears. I do not know how to thank you properly for your attentive ear nor for your ability to care so deeply. I do not know how to thank you for your never ending patience and endurance to stand by me with your friendship even when times are so stressful with me that I may not find time to chat with you as you would like. I do not know how to properly thank you for always trying to give me tidbits of life to divert my attention away from that which is so stressful in my life.
I do not know how to justly thank you for the many prayers you have sent up for the healing of my daughter who has cancer.
And I certainly now do not know how to thank you for this most acurate portrayal of our lives. The way I see it my dearest friend... I will always be indebted to you, for I will always be searching for that awsome way to say "Thank You" to one incredibly fabulous man who has proven his friendship time and time again without ever expecting anything in return. I love you my friend from the bottom of my heart! This poem means more to me than you will ever know. Thank you for writing it! ( even if you didn't write it for me!... but I am almost positive you did...)
With Loving Respect,
Your Friend,
Suzi
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Thank you so much
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John,
What a great job you did on this one! I love it!!! This one really touched me in a way that I was not expecting! Wow! Great job!!!
and love
Nyetta
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This is for a wonderfull friend of mine. She is an angel, as is her daughter. Thank you so much for your generous comments..Which are directed to my friend. She is living it. I am not..I speak for her.. to bring attention to her, certainly not to me...You are kind...Welcome back..
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I read this a few times and pondered your meaning behind it. I came away with several different options. In whatever form you meant this, it's heart wrenching to feel as helpless as you've described. Your honesty and heartbreak are woven throughtout. Nicely done.
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Thank you very much
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Oh dear sweet jesus.....
you have no idea how deeply this touched me, this is completely excellent, and so damned deep into my soul its eerie, as i say, this work is sooo close to my heart its almost painful
T
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Thank you kindly
John
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