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Sad Dreamer…-

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Warm silky night of soft moonlight
Does lure us on our way
Bright starlit skies with fireflies
Cause feelings to betray

Strong passions leap from way down deep
Held long but out of sight
I love you still and will until
I sleep forever’s night

Though just a friend who does pretend
There is no more to this
Strong feeling surge I cannot purge
For nothing more exists

So strong my pain to love in vain
Here longing for your kiss
But cannot do to me or you
For I would be remiss

I cry inside and step aside
As you go on your way
I wish you well while I would dwell
So wanting you to stay

I live it seems with just my dreams
As I walk on alone
Sweet songs unsung from once when young
My life is not my own

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Sad Dreamer…
Wandika 10th July, 2009

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  • Ellis gold member
    July 20
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    Excellent

    This is remarkable beautiful rhyming. I love that. Very well, very, very well written.


    • Wandika gold member
      July 21
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      Again, glad you liked the poem.

      Not too many like rhyme anymore. Not sure why. I tend to sound like Doctor Suisse.


  • Sonja
    July 14

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    Softness of your words and the deepness of your pain is so vivid within each line of this great written poem. It's rhythm beats in the rhythm of heart. Beautiful poetry.
    ~Sonja~


    • Wandika gold member
      July 21
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      Thank you Sonja

      I especially love to hear what you think of my words.

      Jim


  • Legend silver member
    July 12

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    A while my friend since last i read
    the words that you expertly shed
    To touch the readers heart and mind
    and leave a pleasant taste behind

    To chance upon such noble verse
    would make a lesser poet curse
    And yet,they better would aspire
    to emulate,and to acquire
    ability to one day gain
    the statue that you works attain

    Excellent

    • Wandika gold member
      July 12
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      Thank you my friend.

      I’ve wondered late just where you were
      As summer moves so fast, a blur
      Your words too great fo me I fear
      And humbly thank you, great to hear!
      On holiday you must have been
      To beach with grandson and your kin?

  • Theasp
    July 11

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    We the old romantics shall never fade

    Weep I, my brother, for that love so deep, while this times passes on. May God bless the dream of companionship's ultimate pairing, for us all. Be it for contest or no, your words are an inspiration.
    Hugs,
    Sis, the older than you poet-HA!


    • Wandika gold member
      July 21
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      Thanks Sis

      Not on too often. Hay season and garden duties.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 10
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    This makes me sad just reading it my dear brother, I hope all is well, not sure if it's personal or not, but I can feel the pain with tears dripping of this poetic page. I thank you for sharing your pure heart, excellent piece of poetry bro!

    Peace, bro Timothy

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