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I wear your words
like a summer day wears rain
when clouds roll and gather dark
then cover the ground with life's need,
fill air with fire strikes
speak its urgency with sounds of crashing seas.

i wear your touch
in the creases of my skin
the folds of memory, upturned corners
verging light in eyes, a glow reflected to all.

i wear your wants
like sugar beneath my tongue,
an expectant moment ever on my lips.
Where every breath counts like a clock
nearer, and nearer to an hour

when i wear you.



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  • cubert
    July 31

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    Right off, I'm delighted by the imagery. Oh what a thing that would be to hear. It has the vivid passion of the great Latino writers.

    I like the way the i's stop being capitalised after the first one, as if the I/you is secondary to the muse. mmm

    Fantastic way to hold onto someone. Definetly bookmarking this one.


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    July 26

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    Your poetry makes my skin tingle as your sensory imagery fills my imagination. I know of no other poet on this site who so ably captures the softness and gentleness of love...a passion that is consuming but not overblown. While some love poetry makes me want to turn away from witnessing such a personal moment, yours invites me to share the delicacy and joy that is at the center of abiding love. I can't imagine anyone who would not want to be loved like this. Peace, Liz


  • inder silver member
    July 13

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    gorgeous

    this is sheer romance! crafty and well written with precious metaphors that speak the heart's language. Great work!

  • JustBreathe gold member
    July 11

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    Such an image filled write PK. Needs and desires can be like a 'coat'. Here's hoping your wait is almost over...and the 'coat' is a perfect fit.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 10

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    PURE SWOONERY! Oh my, this is so tactile and beautiful...there is a build in intensity, too, I think.

    "cover the ground with life's needs...wear your touch in the creases of my skin, the folds of memory....i wear your wants like sugar beneath my tongue, an expectant moment ever on my lips" STAND ALONE POETRY, PK!

    "...nearer to an hour when I wear you"...have mercy, that's beautiful--so soft and yet intense. I always say you are talented on many fronts, but this is your niche-poetry... it bears repeating particularly here.

    Fantastic, affecting words. Such talent.


  • Daizee silver member
    July 10

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    I wear your touch in the creases of my skin
    Oh my, that's lovely


  • Mari Goes gold member
    July 10

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    Another smiling poem...
    Such a softness you put on those words


  • Rianna Bear
    July 10

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    aawww! it's been so long since I've read your poetry, PK. Now i remember why i added you as a favorite so long ago. This was so beautiful. It spoke with such a soft passion. The words seemed carefully chosen, but flowed from my mind effortlessly. i, simply put, loved it!!


    • Peteskid gold member
      July 10

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      Hey!!!!
      so good t see you on the screen, hope all is well...PK

      • Rianna Bear
        July 10
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        yes, thank you! I have written my first journal today, speaking of the big and great changes in my life...if ever you feel interested enough. lol! great to see your poems again!!

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