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Sunset Field

Dancing beneath the sunlit sky,
Under the clouds so blue,
Without a care in the world.
Singing out my heart,
Belting it to the heavens,
Rejoicing in the twilight air.
Never have I felt so serene,
Never have I been so free.
Nothing else on earth brings
So much pleasure to my soul
As singing in my sunset field.

Author notes

could still use some revision.....any ideas?
Picture Credit: http://www.funxite.com/media/9268-loving-whisper.jpg

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  • crivanea silver member
    July 16
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    very cute poem..I can't think of anything for revision right now..but I do like the simplicity and gentleness of this poem..works wonders for the picture


  • Kira65
    July 11
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    it is very good! it has a great flow