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Fall Asleep

I can't fall asleep
Just Can't close my eyes
Every breathe I take
A peice of my soul dies

It's like trying so hard after giving up
Like seeing something then losing sight
No matter what you do you can't feel
Like losing strength during a fight

My legs go numb and my feet
Body feeling drained almost weak
So much pain in little time
Feels like mentally falling off the peak

My mind hurts, pounding like a drum
Hurting like Hell, Maybe I'm mentally ill
I wish someone would stomp on me
Like a bug in the window sill

The nights at rest with the earth
Feels like the human race is extinct
Wake up in the morning it was a dream
No wonder it was so very distinct.

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  • Hovels 3
    July 11

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    Wow, this poem makes me tired. All we want is to rest. At least, I'm assuming most people want this. We want to rest physically, mentally, emotionally. Like I said in the chat room, life sucks and everyday it will beat the living shit out of you. So, it's a given to feel drained in all three ways. But, as tired as we are, we all suffer from emotional, physical, and mental insomnia from time to time.


  • Kira65
    July 10

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    i really like it, like i said many times before you have a talent for writing!
    i love the ending

    The nights at rest with the earth
    Feels like the human race is extinct
    Wake up in the morning it was a dream
    No wonder it was so very distinct.


  • skycries
    July 10

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    I love how descriptive you are in this poem (I hope I wrote it right) An insight to your dream world. Beautiful.

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