Dear You,
I wish I could say "Me"
but we're two different people
your innocent and naive
I'm cautious and can't trust others
Dear You,
I wish someone told you
rights from wrongs
then you'd be
more carefree and open
instead of second guessing everything
Dear You,
I wish some body would have noticed
how you faked all happiness
your assumed smile
all the cuts upon your arms
never were accidents
Dear You,
I wish I could make it right
tell you to avoid him
don't keep going back
your being used
he's just another manipulative bastard
Dear You,
there are so many things I wish to tell you
but in all truth, will it help?
I can't send this letter back
Can't stand behind when you would tell him "no"
alas, this letter will only be seen from one side, mine
My apologies (for never having courage),
Three Years into the Future
Author notes
oops, I'm not one to use cussing, but that word really is the right one 
In a list
A contest entry
- Prompt: Write a Letter to Your Past Self by Manda Kathryn.
800 points, ended July 19, 21 entries
Honorable mention
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I plan to revise, what do you think?
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this poem is amazing. i can totally relate to it. keep up the good work.
xoxo
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thank you very much. :]
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great poem. i totally understand it!
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We've all been there on all the things that we want to say to someone who has hurt us in some way. That is one reason why I like the "Dear you," at the start of each stanza. Sometimes, we say something, but still have more to say. I took the use of "Dear you" as individual notes given to that person. We often apologize for actions or how things turn out, as if somehow we never did enough to make it better. ~
I like the tone and presentation of the poem. It is full of emotion.
Thanks for entering the contest; it is my pleasure reading it. You did an excellent job making the feelings jump off the page. ~ I intend on judging quickly on the close of the contest. -
A very nice write indeed. Here's an obvious mistake I found: your being used
"your being used"
I do believe it should be you're.
Overall, great job and good luck,
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WOW
NICE POEM
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Thank you very much.
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
I admire how you write:
'I can't send this letter back
Can't stand behind when you would tell him "no"
alas, this letter will only be seen from one side, mine'
I knew this contest would spark thoughts like that and I expected it too - but I always wanted people to have that chance of being able to think 'well what if...?'
for you to write:
'Dear You,
I wish I could say "Me"
but we're two different people'
shows me deep emotions and makes me want to cry some because you are of such a tender age and being unsure and second guessing things at that age is wholly unfair - you should be running round carefree and having fun ... which is what you say here. I wish you could hun.
very touching piece, honest and true.
Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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wow this is good.
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this is genuis! i really like this! You have a lot of talent!
I can really relate
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a brilliant, reflective piece, I´m sure many will relate to this, and many more will have regrets that they wich they could change, a brilliant letter. good luck in the contest
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