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The Withering Willow

Throughout the year
the tree stands in full bloom,
until that time comes -
those cold, dark times of winter.



[CHORUS]
The ground is hard
and brittle. The ground
is layered, crispy and white.
Icicles hang from the
withering tree's branches.



Over night a white coat
decends from the sky
forming a soft, fluffy,
delicate landscape.

The withered tree,
now dominated by
frost, slouches and cracks
disperse all over the
old aged willow tree.

Author notes

B l a c k P h e o n i x

Despite it being winter, supposedly the time of peace and prosperity and what not. People and things still die through out winter and Christmas. Just something for everyone to think about.

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life gold member
    October 29

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    This was good. I enjoyed reading this. It had a amazing flow too it. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in th contset.


  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    October 23

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    Interesting

    I have never seen a willow bloom, Magnolias bloom, their leaves stay green all winter, this is an interesting poem.


  • Heva Feva
    October 6

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    This is so cool! I really like this bit:

    "The ground is hard
    and brittle. The ground
    is layered, crispy and white.
    Icicles hang from the
    withering tree's branches."

    Thank you so much for entering my contest, I love your poem! Good luck...
    -heva


  • Sweet-Sins
    September 24

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    wow this was really good welldone!
    xxx


  • KaylaSHIKARI
    September 1
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    I liked this. Very vivid imagery.
    good luck in my contest


  • Perfect Asymmetry
    August 5
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    I enjoyed reading this poem. What a stunning imagery and choice of words!
    Bravo!
    Nela


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    July 12

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    wow i love your discriptions, sad undertones
    great vivid imagages. and your featured too!!

    Blessings

    Rend


  • tearrsofthemoon
    July 12

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    This is really amazing. It has such good imagery, and is dripping with emotion. It is short, but sweet and right to the point. It really makes the reader think, and what you have written in your AN is so very true. A lot of people overlook that becuase it is suppossed to be the time of merry joy and cheer, but that doesn't mean that people still aren't suffering. You have done a really interesting job writing that out here in this peice. I loved it. Wonderful write poet.


  • earthlover0915
    July 12

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    this is a good poem/song(?). i like the feel of it and the fact that i can just about see the tree your talking about

  • drapedindarkness
    July 11

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    Without death, life would be nothing to cherish
    So with winter, the flowers and fauna deplenish
    I look forward every year for the changing seasons
    And am grateful everyday for so many reasons


  • Dragonbabyx3
    July 10

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    wow! how very true indeed! this is an amazing write! you have done a wonderful job filled with so much emotion!!! great work on this and congrats for being todays poem!


  • awannabepoet
    July 10

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    I really enjoyed reading this delicate and thoughtful poem, where in lies the beauty of life actually if you were to ask me, we all wither and die and in that you find the one true justice in the world.


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    July 10

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    Today's Featured Poem!!!

    This is a somewhat dark, but nice poem. I like dark poetry! It also has a shadow of sadness to it...You have written this well, poet! I am featuring this for today's poem!!!

    Merry Meet, Merry Part,
    Jeremy
    Group Owner


  • Demonic Beauty
    July 10

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    Beautifully written hun. <33

    I really like the Enjambment you included in this [Whether it was on purpose or not, it fits.]

    And the first stanza starts it off quite elegantly. <33

    One thing if i may sugest.
    In these lines:

    until that time comes
    of cold, dark times of winter.

    Maybe substitute "Of" for "those"
    Just to make the flow, flow a little better in that first stanza.

    Other than that.

    A perfect piece.

    <33

    Keep on Shining Hun
    x~Chloe~X

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