...between my fingers
your hair diffuses its secret shine
with the softness of liquid silver...
Illusive dreams slip away
behind curtains of light.
Hesitating morning arrives.
Under my eyelids
a wet, shivery moment
of aurora borealis.
Like a puppy
I try to curl up into a ball
to keep the silent warmth,
trying to fix the big hole
that nostalgia has drilled inside me.
Author notes
Prompt: "Shades of you"
64 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Shades of you... by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended July 11, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congratrulations on the Silver Cup!!
I love these lines:
"trying to fix the big hole
that nostalgia has drilled inside me."
I sometimes feel as though I fell into a big hole, so I know what you mean.
Write on, Poetess!! 
Peace & hugs,
xx Cyn xx
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it's always a pleasure, Sonja.
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Dreams
sometimes are better than memories for we can shape a dream to what we want but must live good or bad the memories we keep.
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Powerful!
Loved this, and congrats!
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If only we could hold onto those dreams sometimes. This is beautifully done. The subtle sadness at the end is so touching. I have felt that feeling before.
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I agree, you've found all the shades of love, of which nostalgia is one too, in this poem, Sonja. beautifully expressed as only you can.
~ Nicolette
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I think you have found the shades in perfect stillness and color here, beautifully done C
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A beautiful write. You paint a delightful picture of shades in this piece. Good imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Nice use of simile. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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