Forget tonight for the sun emerges,
our frivolous woes have been omitted
and love returns our intimate urges.
Dawn breaks and trepidation submerges,
we’ve both implored to become acquitted
Forget tonight for the sun emerges.
Daylight banishes our wanton scourges,
we are unremittingly committed
and love returns our intimate urges.
We shed our hate as our fear diverges,
in loves hall we ask to be admitted.
Forget tonight for the sun emerges
All doubt vanishes as our mind purges
into passions embrace we’ve submitted,
and love returns our intimate urges.
Together we stand as our love merges
into life which we have recommitted.
Forget tonight for the sun emerges
and love returns our intimate urges
Author notes
Written for english, no one in my class can find fault with it, if you have any editing suggestions that also fit in with the villanelle form.
Comments
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This is an excellent write and needs no improvement nor amendments that I can see Sis
The word play, flow and style all suit you very well
Bravo hon
'D' (Scott)
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Ohh Yay, thank you. so the flow is all ok? I got told that it doesnt flow too well, ie: at all.
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