The games you played
You rolled the dice
You took a chance
Your bet, my life
You dealt the cards
Aces always loaded
And your helpless little bitch
Well, I always folded
Kings off the bottom
Hidden in your motions
With such a perfect poker face
I couldn't read your notions
Your underground games
As you buy your way in
Another dollar of my innocence
There's no way you won't win
Another game
Your bet, my heart
As you slap the table
For another card
As I hide your losses
With a crimson blade
The scars I won
In the games you played
Author notes
Soo...if you look at this like a disfunctional relationship it will be extremely easy to understand. I wanted to put a slight twist on the title, and not make it so obvious.
Stanza2: relate that to the idea of getting beat or hit. Dealt the cards like he dealt the blows..
Stanza3: poker face - i was so in love and trying so hard.. i couldn't read what was really there and what was really happening.
Stanza4: rape. pretty self explanatory. "there's no way you won't win" - it's going to happen..he's going to win no matter what.
Stanze6: cutting to try to ease of the pain that the "game" is causing
hopefully that helps expalin the whole idea behind the title and propmt. using a card game to describe the abuse and hurt i went thru..
i think I'm pretty happy with it..just..let me kno what you think.
A contest entry
- ♥Only rhyme title contest♥ #4 by Ami.
570 points, ended August 4, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If you skipped the authors notes, i suggest you read it. It's not as long as it looks, and it helps!
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
I normally don't like reading author notes because it can distract me from the poem but it didn't this time, it helped me understand and appreicate this poem just a bit more
Very well penned; congratulations on the Gold
Best of Luck
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Stay safe
~Manda
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This is awesome I love how you used a game of cards with it
Awesome take on the title thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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I love this poem!!!! It has to be one of the best poems I have ever read. I loved how you used the game of poker as an example of a lovegame and how the person on the end of it just isn't going to win. Because the guy playing has such a good "pokerface" that you can't tell when he is lying or telling the truth. This poem rings true to me, the person on the other end being played. And I love it. Best of luck in the contest I hope you win. <3
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wonderfully written.
good luck in this contest. :] -
wow this is really good i havent seen an analogy liek this in a long time an you pulled it off great im impressed
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