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My Heart Was Yours To Break.

I crave you so, now more than ever, my one irreplaceable love.
Though what you done, it broke my heart; My heart was yours to break.
Those dreamy days by the riverside, gone yet held in memory.
Memories fond, of your passionate touch, I try desperately to hide.
The love we shared shall never be matched, time stood still for us.
A partnership made in heaven; held firmly together by lust.
The lust was lost as the love departed, the second that I found out.

Her pain was self inflicted, yet it failed to compare to mine.
The cheating bitch could not resist, the most resentful of all crimes.
Had he been a stranger, your carelessness would have broken my heart.
Although the fact he was my best friend, meant that you destroyed my world.
My cold hardened fist thundering against his skull, offered no compromise,
For what he stole from beneath my eyes, was once as precious as gold.
Blinded by a shield of love, my downfall was my ease of trust.

Yet over a year has passed. Without thinking of you, not a day goes by;
Time flies.
Maintaining since then I had misunderstood, her façade may hold some truth.
Relationship time has returned again, and I find myself back by the riverside
Though this time around, I broke barriers down; a more beautiful girl was found.
Her touch is felt as I felt yours, yet what’s missing is the truth.
Looking back, I was paranoid; jealous of a ploy of which was entirely in my mind.

Author notes

The Third Stanza For This Piece Has Been Removed To Be Re-Worked Several Times And Then Re-entered And Then Re-removed As I Wasn't Pleased With It.. Can't Make Up My Mind :/

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  • RobertPaulson
    July 17
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    For what he stole from beneath my eyes, was once as precious as gold.
    Blinded by a shield of love, my downfall was my ease of trust.

    reallly liked those lines. robbing someone of their discernment in the name of love. well written.

    thank you for entering and good luck


  • forbidden-colour
    July 14

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    You should have used your third stanza, it would of rounded the piece of perfectly.
    Thank you for entering.


  • emmaline2310
    July 10

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    that was a really good poem. i think you should put in the third stanza, though. i liked it! girls can be really mean sometimes (i am one, so i would know) GOOD JOBB!!


  • kurdishking
    July 9

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    wow packed with emotion and i feel it
    its sad sometimes what happens and how cold girls can be
    good job i really enjoyed reading this emotion filled poem