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break a flimsy ring

then,
there's the matter of

freedom

i am not deprived
but free to live

without

without
stench
expense
and jitters that
lie me into slow death

i breathe
deep and sure
without a cough
without a wheeze
so please don't try to tell me
what i'm missing

kissing me is not
an ashtray anymore
and i
have money
better spent on
life instead of
lies told by
addiction
hell bent on
killing me

life is too dear
to be set aflame
for fear of losses
written in the
flimsy rings of
fake satisfaction.

Author notes

I smoked for nearly 35 years. Been smoke free for nearly 2 years now. I read a book and I quit smoking. No drugs, no patches, no bs. Wasn't the first time I tried, but it was honestly the easiest thing I have ever done once I did it.

The book was "The Easy Way to Stop Smoking" by Allen Carr.

There are no good reasons to continue to smoke. NONE.

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  • Sadness N Love
    October 5

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    Hey

    You'res is very nice, You are a very good poet and thank you for the comment on mine. I hope i get to read more of your poems sometime.

  • AFrost
    September 15

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    I can easily relate to the situation you have presented. I was never an avid smoker but for the entire duration I smoked I never enjoyed it yet I still wasted money knowing I was self enflicting damage to my vital organs. Good write

  • AFrost
    September 15
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    Hey thankyou for the edit on the word tragic. I wrote that at like 4 am but excuses aside I appreciate your thoughts.


  • simone waters
    July 10

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    Great pen, Violet Moodswing. I enjoyed the imagery of "flimsy rings"

    I want to tell you what happened with me. I quit about 2 and a half weeks ago. I love to go antiquing and to second-hand junk stores. It's sort of like treasure hunting. You never know what you'll unearth... The day before yesterday I was in such just a place and saw a blue book that had Stop Smoking on its cover. I picked it up and carried it around with me for a little while, then put it back on the shelf, deciding not to buy it.
    I read your message earlier today and wondered- Allen Carr. Hm. the name sounded familiar.

    I had errands to run today and did so. As an after thought I stopped by that same store to just take a quick run through. (Merchandise changes every day)
    and there it was, The Easy Way to Stop Smoking - by? Allen Carr.

    I just smiled and bought the book. Thank you...


  • tarnished-angel42
    July 9

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    Totally Wow !

    I love the form of this work . The simplistic words , and the flow . I mean wow. Your Point is well taken , and Thank you for the "info" This line means the world to me." then,
    there's the matter of

    freedom

    i am not deprived
    but free to live
    "


  • awannabepoet
    July 9

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    I went from three packs a day to nothing in 24 hours.

    I had been smoking since I was in grade 5 so you can say I had plenty of experience.

    LOL

    Congrats on quitting that nasty habit.

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