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Go not gentle into that dark rite...

i cannot spel I cannot rite
But by God I do emote u see
Im looking for the home of trite
And wow! Ive found AP!!

Do better!

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  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    November 17
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    very cute.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    November 9
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    Lol! This is great!

    Thanks for sharing your humor!

    x

  • Ouch!


  • condor gold member
    October 24

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    Beautifully penned and quite humorous. There are the good and the bad and the ugly... and they are all part of our big beautiful family here at AP. Job well done! I didn't forget the clappy's this time. lol

    • abu nuwas
      October 24
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      condor

      Aha! Thank you. You are right, and I feel myself slipping down your scale.


      • condor gold member
        October 24
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        I don't think you are slipping down at all. I loved the piece very much and I have a great sense of humor.

        • abu nuwas
          October 24
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          condor

          No, I didn't mean this, which was only meant to amuse. I have just recently been writing about War-- the Great War, and poppies, and Iraq and Afghanistan. It goes against the grain with me-- I would rather be silly and frivolous, but I seem to keep churning them out, and, what is as bad, seem totally unable to edit them. It all seems so sad -- I don't know whether it is pointless or not, that is too easy to say, but I do know that the dead don't come back when it is all over, as in toy soldiers, and the maimed and the mad can suffer forever. Now, see, there I go! It won't cheer you up, so what is the point of it? It goes against my little idea of increasing the sum of human happiness, even by a nano-iota. Sorry.


          • condor gold member
            October 24
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            Well , I still love it so have a chuckle and get down to the serious business of being funny.......

            • abu nuwas
              October 24

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              condor

              I am glad. But you must know that saying "Be funny!" is probably the only way to silence the most natural of comedians!

              E


  • Iliad Keys
    October 19
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    Aaagghh!!! You have wounded my writer's spirit to the core! Hahahaha.

  • Purrsanthema
    October 17
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    Ouch! Fine epigram!


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    October 15
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    lol...omg I love this....so clever...nice write my friend
    T

    • abu nuwas
      October 15
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      Theresa

      Thank you so much. Not reallyt intended as a put down tho' ----but I expect you have seen enough of the kind of thing that inspired this!!!!

      Edward


      • Snowing Kisses gold member
        October 15
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        lol..im the dyslexic..uses too much text slang yhoghurt in the caps key girl.....I thought I inspired it haha


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 9

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    Ah so true! We see many of those here. The youth my friend, they got license to create their own language (which I understand very little of)
    Another amusing way to show reality


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    October 8

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    Sir! I think your tongue was too firmly in your cheek when you wrote this
    I agree that many of the offerings fall into the category you outline in line 1 and at times yes AP is the home of the trite.
    Fortunately there are also gems as worthy of snuffling out as the famous truffles.
    Jim

    • abu nuwas
      October 9
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      Jim

      It was only intended as a gentle jibe -- I think I had had a particularly bad patch of having to fly from one young person's site to another. I agree there are 'gems', but I compare it rather to going to fringe theatre -- you have to trawl quite a bit of dross to get to something wonderful.

      Edward

      • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
        October 9
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        Or to put it another way Edward "You have to kiss an awful lot of frogs before you find a Princess"
        At the risk of self-promotion this reminds me of one of my own offerings inspired by the AP "poets" http://allpoetry.com/poem/2082290
        A little effort based on The Charge of the Light Brigade!
        Jim


  • Aedara-Wren silver member
    October 5

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    This made me chuckle and feel a little guilty that I often have exactly the same view point. I would say well written but I'm not sure that was the point.


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    September 20

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    Love it!!!

    I have many of the same problems...spelling, writing, and many other problems but for the most part my life is perfect...just don't ask me to spell....Thank goodness for spell checker on the computer...

    This is a cute and you have come to the right place for trite...there is much trite here on AP..along with some wonderous poems...Thank you for reading my poem "nothing profound"...it is one of the trite ones...

    Darlene

    • abu nuwas
      September 21
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      Darlene

      How nice to hear someone own up that 'for the most part my life is perfect'. Makes such a difference from all those people self-harming, with horrible mums and dads. I'm not being snooty; it just makes a nice change. And means I don't have to quickly move on.

      Edward


  • mgmc gold member
    September 15
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    Very funny and well written! AP has its own set of quirks!k

    • abu nuwas
      September 15
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      mgmc

      Glad it made you smile! Yes, quirks....and how!

  • meena krish
    September 9

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    I find this has a poem which is honest and at
    the same time humorous. Liked this little write
    & thank you for the comment


  • Pattiboo silver member
    September 7

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    don't need to rite don't need to spel
    nor even rime or scan
    just brek it into littal lines
    then call it potree man!

    tee hee I can't do grammar either

    • abu nuwas
      September 7
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      A lot of people

      are tempted to have a go themselves, and well done you! e


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 6

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    Hahahahahaha!

    I got a good chuckle out of this one. The best humorous poem I've seen in a while. Well done!...Alby


  • katie marie silver member
    August 30
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    Yes, I've found it takes some looking to find what is worth reading.

  • Judith Chandler
    August 15

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    I'm afraid that's what is happening! Your piece gave me a laugh.

    Let's try to make sure this doesn't happen in our small corners.

    Judith

    • abu nuwas
      August 15
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      Judith

      Thank you. I am glad it brought a smile to your face. When I wrote it, I was tempted to go on for pages like that - I am glad I did not.

      e

      • Judith Chandler
        August 16
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        It would be fun for a while to go on and on but I think you made the right decision. I wonder if there are "poets" out there who think it's serious and no kidding.

        TC
        J


  • ronnica
    August 11

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    so tru so tru
    insipid trite
    inspire us here
    from morn to nite
    but still we rave
    of what they rite
    and so it goes
    we praise we pose
    captivated.
    by rhyme and prose
    but mostly,
    we pleasure those
    who beautify our life


  • Yes, I'm afraid that is partly true. I am afraid it's affected me to the extent that I don't always bother to correct people's grammar and spelling when I am holding a contest. As for trite...well, perhaps I am guilty of that myself sometimes.

    Enjoyed this write.

    • abu nuwas
      August 6
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      Judith

      It really was only intended as a gentle jibe. When I re-read what I have written, I am very frequently amazed by the errors which have slipped through.

      TC
      Edward


  • Cynewulf
    July 26

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    This would have been smart
    If you had written it as
    A good Villanelle

    Like that Thomas bloke
    Who you alluded to in
    The poem's title.

    What do I know, eh?
    I have replied with a crap
    pointless chain haiku...


  • AllexisReed
    July 25
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    Very well said!

  • if only i cud rite this gud

    if you look a little more
    just behind the AP door

    you'll find the masters of poetry
    resting there for you to see

    from D Thomas to R Tagore
    you couldn't ask for any more
    classic popetry you're looking for
    go through , locate the OP door!

    http://oldpoetry.com/



  • How true. Triteness, sentimentality and illiterate slop are to be found here by the cliché-laded bucket load. However, there are some genuinely talented and amusing writers here. Us for example.

    • abu nuwas
      July 14
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      Just a gentle jest....

      I have just sent a long-winded put-down to this man/woman, without realising s/he had praised me. But I cannot encourage people to despise others, I cannot. I should certainly like to know who other people think are the best poets here.


  • Symphony
    July 12

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    LOL, this gave me a good giggle just when I needed it! :]

    Although, I do wonder should 'see' be changed to 'c' ...

  • Ah, they would never use the word, "emote." Now "rant," they would use that.
    Well there are a lot of youngsters here. The art is avoiding them, lol

  • HIS IS SIMPLY WONDERFUL
    BRAVO MY FRIEND


  • rbruce gold member
    July 9
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    You have made a statement here, and done it well. Bravo!!

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