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Inhale, Exhale

The lights are out.
My eyes can see though-
I see you beside me,
Sleeping,
Peaceful,
Only to turn to me
With open eyes,
Looking into my soul with beautiful eyes.
I'm lost for words
To describe what your gaze does to me,
And with one simple smile
I've forgotten how to breathe again.

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  • the masked one
    July 11
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    Thank you for the kind comments


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    July 10

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    I like your use of the title as a prompt. True love is incredible, and I'd love to see you expand on this idea later on. Thank you so much for entering.


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    July 9

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    Beautiful dear. I really like how you wrote this and wish for it myself. His beautiful eyes looked into mine once upon a time but now..... now they are gone... I love you write and I remember those days right now with pain but soon with memories eye. Thank you for sharing this.