Captivated in your long
hypnotic gaze
sweet sensation ablaze
Your audacious grin
arose seductive sin
You awaken depths within
Your magnetic touch
of sweet Desire
Impassioned flame
of passionate fire
Sensations exploding in your embrace
Light and Flicker in a million starburst
Taking me to a higher place
To fathom your desires,
is what I crave
The warmth of your breath
Leave me enslave
Your secret in mirrored form
I see reflection of your thoughts
Electricfys when you touch my hand
I feel you and understand
I feel the rhythm of your heart
echo through my soul
Ecstasy in heat of your body
enticing me to loose control
Daredevil I yearn for what you're asking
Eagerly I promise you I will
I ache for this unforgettable moment
You're irresistable still
Please tell me what you think
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Very well written, only saw one mistake
depths(sp) line 6
the rhyme scheme is a little confusing at times but I really like the way it's written. Nicely done!
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you should enter it in my next contest. Great job chicka. You have a wonderful talent. Keep up the wonderful work. WOW.
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I loved it. You don't need no criticism. You don't need to revise it. Its perfect the way it is. Your wonderful at writing poetry. Two thumbs on that one. Keep going on your awesome poetry. Perfecto.
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Great job. I loved this poem. You have a great love for poetry. Continue you on.
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Nice
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Very sensually beautiful, I love this <3
Thanks for sharing, have a great day!
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This is really good your poem tugged at me. Enticing me to loose control I love it!
So much passion and excetement is in your poem. Beautifully written and thank you for sharing I really enjoyed this
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Oh My~
Now this pulls like Your other verse did and brings the Reader closer-
up front and personal to experience through energy
Passion also sense of Touch- each word exudes
Love this like I did the other sensual Voice
spoken that won an HM
Your audacious grin
arose seductive sin
You awaken depts within
Holy Moly
Now that drips sweat...
Yep it sure does
...walks into wall
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in all You do
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Such a passionate piece which demands recognition. This awakens all of the senses to a wilderness of pleasure and oneness wild and free immersed in the intoxicating passion's of sensuality. I feel there is a flame that has been lit within you that refuses to fade. Very seductive... passionate!
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