Dark and dank, coated with rust...
Within remains decay and wither...
The smell within inspires disgust...
Through this conduit, unspeakable flood...
The round walls drip with foul mixture...
Grime infested waters mixed with blood...
Within the water are decaying fragments...
Of bodies decomposing, ghoulish fissure...
The rotted air permeates the vents...
Drying gore hangs from the ceiling in fleshy vines...
In this pipe of death, The Conduit.
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wow. i feel really .. comfortable reading this. your poetry is so wickedly amazing. i always love reading it. well done.
J.J.S -
Very dark, deep and creative.
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Whoa! way creepy lol. Sounds like something out of a horror movie! I loved the last couple lines. I feel they finished of your poem nicely and kept up with the dark, dank, horrific scene you painted.
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damn,the mind sure is a terrible thing to taste,you are the king of macabre,you do amaze me bro.
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The flow matches the gore as it seeps downward, your rhyme blends the blood together, darkness shall reign with you as the leader.
Done to perfection.
Riftkin
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Love this Different Rhyme scheme....for you it's different...
great stuff's!!!!
what is a conduit??? .......
other than not understanding the subject lol this was awesome in vocab and rhythm
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i liked that the rhyming was consistant here- you seem to have a flair for it.
"Through this conduit, unspeakable flood...
The round walls drip with foul mixture...
Grime infested waters mixed with blood..."
excellent. -T
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Very Impressive piece
You do dark very well
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You are an amazing writer.
Did I say this before? And: that I would love to see you write about light?
Thank you for reading my words. I am but a flow of love, trying to be visible in darkness.
Love to you, Poet.
Myra
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What an original concept...gore being the pipe-slag in the conduit. Great gorey imagery leaving the reader to wonder what transpired prior to their cylindrical resting place.
Well done...Alby
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again... creepy. i think of those big cement pipes i see trucks transporting and once theyare placed in the ground.... what will grow in them. ok.. shivers.
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