3 months in and you didn't know
I was living inside of you
puff puff on that cigarette
doctor said, "you've got to stop"
"here comes number four"
puff puff on that cigarette
you stopped. dead.
completely off it.
puff puff no cigarette
heres you beautiful baby girl
misshapen nose, birth defect
puff puff, back to the cigarette
7 years later, several more puffs
the doctor says, "I can't help you"
puff puff, you need a cigarette
your family cries, stop it,
you're going to die
crush crush, good bye cigarette
too late for you, too late for life
its eaten everything away
death is all that remains......
Author notes
"love saved us"
i was born with a birth defect due to my mothers smoking. it wasn't so bad, my nose was collapsed at birth, and eventually it popped into normal-ish shape.
my mother died of cancer when I was nine, but was diagnosed when I was seven.
she died because of smoking.
Be scathing my darlings.
A contest entry
- Smoke Rings and Dangerous Things ... by tarnished-angel42.
1500 points, ended July 9, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hmm..
Comments
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I love this ...
and your strength for your honesty . You were a very lucky young lady. The birth defect could have been more. I like the use of "puff,puff" to show the disreguard of someone elses health , or power of the hold smoking has on people. This piece is vivid and straight forward " crush crush, good bye cigarette
too late for you, too late for life
its eaten everything away
death is all that remains......" Bravo !
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I like the "puff puff" refrain.
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