Roaming fiends imposed their filth,
chasing color from her dreams.
Tainted flesh and hollowed hopes,
replace her innocent abandon.
Exhausted by the midnight ice,
nightmares turn to life.
Frostbit angel lost her wings,
in a feathered bed.
Now dim lit corners conceal her grief,
as expressions dance across her face...
practiced and perfected.
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This is an incredibly powerful write, very sad and very moving. Every line, speaks vloumes.
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a good piece, ah there are so many in the world today, so many young people - living in those sahdows and having a miserable existence, we live in a crazy world i think.
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Thank you, and yes, there are way too many people lost in the shadows. A crazy world indeed!
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Exhausted by the midnight ice, nightmares turn to life. Frostbit angel lost her wings, in a feathered bed. This is so excellent this is my favorite lines. Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed your poem.
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wow darlin
you are an amazing writer darlin,i always enjoy reading your poems,they are powerful and emotional,i love this poem -
The photo goes great with the poem. Maybe a break after abandon and after bed? But that's the only thing I'd suggest."Exhausted by the midnight ice,
nightmares turn to life.
Frostbit angel lost her wings," Those 3 lines are my favorite. This was beautifully written. You did a wonderful job. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.
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wow,your writing is beautiful,such emotion and your wording,its amazing,wow
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Awe thanx sweetz! And right back at ya
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Humm..so much sense and so much depth you have shown while stating the truth...you have a strong view to make open the secrets of the life.. a great poem..well done...well done...
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Thank you very much
It is an honor to recieve such a great compliment from a poet such as yourself, thank you again.
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Wow. This was absolutely amazing. I loved the imagery and the emotion in this. Such beautiful words. I especially loved those last three lines.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Thanks for the comment sweetz
Something is up with AP again (or maybe my computer) so I can't tell if you recieve the "rate this comment" points or not?
So if you didn't recieve them please don't think I ignored your comment...
This is the 2nd time this has happened with AP (or my computer and AP) and it corrercted itself last time so hopefully it will again this time
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No problemo.
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Wow!!! Just stopping by to read more from you... Glad I did ^_^ this is wonderful.. Compact and full... Not a word wasted.. A poem
that speaks volume.. Great write .. I do believe you touch a sensitive topic brilliantly..
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You have an amazing gift!This is absolutely brilliant!
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Wow
This is so heartbreaking, I can't even comment. It almost makes me want to cry, you have put into words the very things I cannot bring myself to face. You write beautifully, the pain and agony of being damaged in ways that are irrepairable.
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