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Subcutaneous

I'm wounded subcutaneously.
The things you say don't leave a mark,
They don't make me bleed.
It wouldn't matter if they did
I doubt you'd notice.
Tender to the touch
But invisible to the eye,
Subcutaneous afflictions prove
When you wear a smile
Other things go unnoticed.

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Written March 23rd, 2004

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  • natster
    April 10, 2004
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    WOO HOO another big word from amy that natalie doesnt know... and you said i knew every word there was.... HA i have no idea what s-u-b whatever it is means, but thats ok, besides that word i understood the rest of the poem lol awesome amy, all ur poems are

    lylas

  • jaded soul
    April 1, 2004
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    i loved this one, good job


  • March 26, 2004
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    Subcutaneous---biiiig word buddy! I had to look this one up hahaha, ur vocabulary is so broad, I dont see how u come off as saying that I have a huge vocab--compared to YOU I'm nothing haha, I loved this poem, you do so well conveying your message, I am jealous

    When you wear a smile
    Other things go unnoticed.

    ^^my favorite lines from this piece! nice job!

  • Tim-0-Tee
    March 26, 2004
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    Wow amy this is another awsome poem by you i epsecaly like the word choice good job when i go to see if u have any new poems its like opening cristmas presents

  • skreaminsosound
    March 25, 2004
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    Haha I have no problem with people who can't spell - its just not some peoples' thing. And my brother is dislexic and spells really phonetically, so I've got some practice at reading some pretty horrible spelling Thanks for your comment, and your entry!

    A/E/S
    Edited on Mar 25, 9:48 p.m. because 'Guacamole'.


  • knots untangled
    March 25, 2004
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    i lvoe it! i entered your contest, and i know one of my words is mis spelled, you know bout paper mace, or however you spell it, i spelled however you spell mace wrong! but i liked this poem, so i made the requierments, and i will msot likely read a lot more of yuors! i know, i'm a horrible speller, so i jsut thought i should warn you on that one! great write, and i enjoyed it!
    Meg

  • skreaminsosound
    March 24, 2004
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    Subcutaneous isn't my word - I stole it from Celia haha.

    A/E/S


  • Elemental Awareness
    March 24, 2004
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    I like this poem mo, well I like all your poems mo. They all are so descriptive and they use large words sometimes which I could never do, I mean I could try but I would use them in the wrong context.
    heh well anyways great job 'budda'
    lylas
    Flowers

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