I find myself affixed on
speckled fragments of slate;
polished; nurtured by the
sea, while I lay mesmerized--
deep within the tranquility
of my foam blanket.
My thoughts are swept away
by gull colonies, dancing upon
azure, as if in a ballet on a
westerly wind, focused only
on visions of liquid ivory
reflections adrift in euphoria.
Emblazoned within the realm
of my inner-most desires, I
discover delight by the mere
sight of a cove, sculpted to
perfection by seaborne masters
of centuries passed, daring me
to unravel any mysteries hidden
within the periphery of its canvas.
Author notes
Prompt: The sea in 20 lines or less, and the AP poet, liquidmindforever.
Photo credit: FreeNaturePictures.com
perfection by seaborne masters
of centuries passed........
This particular part is a bit ambiguous, I think. I'm referring to the rolling tides which do, in fact, sculpt these coves. The way I see it, they are "seaborne masters of centuries passed."
Also, in the first stanza, I'm referring to spotting some sea glass on the shore.
A contest entry
- Let the sea inspire you. by The Fun House.
700 points, ended July 21, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites, Im crazy. by Menna.
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Please feel free to offer constructive comments, as I welcome those.
Comments
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beautiful descriptions, there is majesty in each and every ripple... the energy that leaps from the pic is mesmerising, and your words only enhance it..
cheers
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a lovely serrene picture of the ocean and a single bird enjoying the freedom of it all
Mesmerized by you writing and how you capture this scene so well.
Makes me want to walk down the road tomorrow morning and just sit there watching the waves
A remarkable piece and I don't think you should change any of it!!
DD xx
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Mesmerising! You write of her beauty and it makes me long to walk her shores and listen to the waves that whisper of her depths...Beautiful!!
Thanks for sharing!
~Pastel
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This is truly stunning. My favorite poem of yours yet! Lovely phrases and images. It took me on a trip through the sea. The entire thing is genius, a delight to read and a fantastic journey to dream of. I love everything about this.
Peace
Cassie
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Wonderful
Another terrific oceanic poem that was a pure pleasure to read and ponder. Best of luck in the contest. -
Wow! You're getting really good at these! I agree with some of your other readers who have remarked that you excell in writes about the sea, and small wonder!
Well done, my friend!
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This is a truly beautiful poem
I adore the word use that creates the imagery so effortlessly on the page - the picture confused me somewhat because I can't quite work out what it is 
but all in all lovely
Unfortunately as per the first rule of my contest:
"It has to be a poem that is NOT entered in another contest! I have always found it rude. If it is entered in one that is OVER & JUDGED then it is welcome here; but if the contest isn’t over & judged don’t bother entering it here."
I am going to have to DQ this as this is entered in Menna's contest that isn't over and my contest isn't judged.
Best of Luck in other Contests
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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I forgot I had posted that for another contest.
Thanks for mentioning that, Manda. It was definitely unintentional. I'll have to post a different one.
Don
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beautiful write! you have no idea how much comfort you have given me with all your thoughtful words in your messages. For you to take the time to talk to means more to me than I can tell you. To be honest well I dont know, I dont think you actually enterd a poem in my contest but if you could just put something, I truly feel you deserve the gold just for your messages alone. They helped me more than any poem I received! So please send one into my contest just so I can give it to you! And my dad lived in Seattle, but he never did tell me much about it, just alot of rain! Again I thank you, your words and your stories are truly amazing and touching.
Danielle
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But it wouldn't be anonymous in your anonymous contest. LOL
I will write something, and it would be my pleasure. Your dad definitely inspired me with some thoughts of Seattle this morning, and for that, I am thankful to him for it. Seattle is my favorite city in the world. I feel so close to my mom there. What your dad said about the rain is very true. They have a saying in Seattle that I once saw on a t-shirt when I was little. "We don't tan in Seattle; we rust!" I feel my bolts rusting already.
I am so glad to have shared this with you. I felt in my gut the whole time, so I have your dad to thank for that. Just as I said before, he has always been with you, and that will never change. He will always be proud of you. I know that's true, because I feel it, and I have never second guessed a gut feeling. I am so glad to have been able to give you some peace. Your dad has known all along your fear, and he will continue to find new ways to help you with it, because that's what fathers do. I know that because I am also a father who loves his children so very much, just as your dad does.
Don
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Beautiful.
It is captivating and well written,
leads you into the beauty and overall feel of the piece.
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Thank you so much, Blue.
My computer is on the blitz from a virus again, so I will try to get at least one of your poems read on this library computer before my time runs out.
Don
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Beautifully done!!!
Inspiring, mysterious & full of wonder...
Amazing imagery & passion wrapped in a strong narrative that enthralled throughout...
Impressive as always...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Thank you so much, Fritz.
I'm very behind on replying to comments. My computer got nailed by another virus. Your comments are always so thoughtful and encouraging. It really means a lot, Fritz.
Don
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excellent
Such a tremendous write. So very creative and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you so much, penman.
I love writing about the sea.
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Wow~
You know when I digested what You have written-
I kept feeling as if there for You paint with vivid detail
These lines grabbed and tugged hard
speckled fragments of slate;
polished; nurtured by the
sea,
If a person had never seen the *sea*
he or she would be able to visualize
through Your words
Powerful imagery also reference to:
foam blanket Beautiful~
Excellent take on the prompt
Appreciate Your visit to my work~
Keep that quill dancing~ Woot!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Thank you so much for such gracious comments, Desire.
This really made my day.
Don
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I personally would not alter what you've written here. It is a beautiful piece and really captivated me. The only thing is the last stanza doesn't feel like it should be the last, it is like there should be just a touch more and I can not seem to put my finger on it. But overall, this is excellent.
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Thank you so much.
I actually feel the same about the last stanza. I'm probably going to add another stanza, or two, to this poem. I cut it off once I got to the limit of 20 lines for the contest.
Don
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BREATH TAKING
you have captured the very essence of peace and beauty upon your canvas of words...soothing to look upon with the minds eye...softly as the sea whispers to the heart...yes! breath taking to say the very least and thank you kind sir for sharing it with me
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Sheer loveliness:
"azure, as if in a ballet on a
westerly wind, focused only
on visions of liquid ivory
reflections adrift in euphoria."
Respect and love for the sea permeates this write - well-done and good luck in your contest!
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very nice, imagery that brings a reader into the scene to expereince a sense of how sun and sea can amaze us with beauty, very well done...PK
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There is not a poet anywhere who writes about your love of the sea like you. This is another shining example of your fabulous mariner poems, and I look forward to the day when you gather all your oceanic pieces in a book, because I will be the first in line to purchase a copy. Best of luck in the contest, and keep up the wonderful works.
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Thank you so much, David.
As always, I find so much encouragement from your comments.
Don
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Lovely
Hey sweetie,
Thank you for sharing this beauty with us.
Good luck in the contest
till next time
stay
liquid
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what a remarkable piece. your desciption of the waves and the sea glass, the cover are imacculate. so serene and peaceful.
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Amazing realism
This poem is so beautiful, I had to read it once again it made me fell as if the spray of the oceans tide was hitting my face, I could subconsciously hear, taste and smell everything. Beautiful poem
Good luck in the contest.
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You do these sea/ocean writes so well. I know your love for it, and it shines whenever you write about it. Another great one from you.
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