When I look at you,
My heart is torn in two.
You look right through me,
With no idea of the turmoil thats going on inside.
And yet ... you seem to be ...
The right guy for me.
I hope you read this,
Yes I do,
For you should know that I love you!
There! I said it!I love a guy!
Too bad that if you read this,
You will not know it's me.
For even as I write this now,
I know that you will never know,
My true feelings and
That you will never know it's me!
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I think many people feel like this at some point of their lives and the way you wrote this reminded me of the first guy I ever fell in love with. Great job
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hehehe I like the fact that you told us you were a girl really helped. So it's a sweet poem and If I had to tell a boy I was in love with him even today it would probably be something like what you have written. It's a sweet piece for one lucky guy if he knows. If he doesn't he's missing out on being with a really amazing girl. Thanks for entering.
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Woah...this is awesome XD
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Poetically, I think this would benefit if you ceased using chat speak i.ei '2' instead of 'two'
It is considered lazy writing.
The love you feel is well expressed as you declare yourself and fight through the fear of expressing it
Well penned 
I liked the tenth line.
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Thanks for your opinion! The reason I put my poetry on this sight is because I'm too shy to do it any other way and find out how much others like my poetry! You'll keep me writing if you keep reading!
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