flutter by, blind,
as the brush captured your eyes
discontent future bashfully
sighed in the rippling waves
of the air, as I weaved
through the colors faded.
snicker, alone
with the grey of bitterness
tinting your lips
as you feathered them
across my dreams
I warped my soul
in the softness of your touch
only to feel ugly in the shadow of
your smile.
translucent wings
dusted my cry as
the rainbow broke into
particles, like our history.
The sun broke through
the gloom, a witness
to my descent.
I loved and became damaged,
flutter by, blind, with cruelty
I painted my wings back on
and walked through the grey
of your bitterness.
Author notes
Working on my muse, bare with me please.
A contest entry
- even broken butterflies can fly by AutumnGypsy.
700 points, ended July 14, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excelent
well written and makes me wanna se the end. So i give my thumbs up for this one!!
well done.
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cuz!
ya know i realized i hadnt heard form ya or read anything in ages!!! so here i am 
awesome beautiful write hun! great imagery and so softly expressed.
well done on the gold!!
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worth the Gold
your amazing, very visual, powerful , and leaves the reader with the knowlage and hope that builds faith that they too wii make it through.. thank you for sharing your wanderful gifts ... Don
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This is beautifully excellent!!
Keep writing!!
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I can clearly see why this took first place hun.
I mean wow, I love it, it's the good stuff that your creative mind weaves sad beautifully. Congrates on the gold, and write on!
Your bumble bee.
-Timothy
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This is stunning, how we are made to feel this way, so often. I loved the wording and the emotion this piece was penned with. Best to you in the contest
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It has been too long since I was graced by your words This is fabulous hun! Absolutely beautiful, deep and intriguing
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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It has been a while! hope things are ok with you! thank you much for your comment too! I'll have to return the favor!
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well done
seems you are looking back at someone, you have a history with him/her, and you are missing that time...good use of words.
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This was so well done it described my relationship with someone completely. Now that he has walked away it describes it even more. You did a great job on this but the only suggestion I would have is to capitalize the beginning of each stanza the first letter of the first word. Thank you for sharing this with us it was bery well done.
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You shouldnt discretit yourself you have done a great job with the prompt given. As usual you have given us a wonderful poem
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Aww thank you.. I'm trying! First time I've written in a while . thanks much for your comment hun
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oh hun... your muse is working just fine.
good luck in the contest 'my adopted one'
Juls
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jeez..
how hauntingly beautiful! wow..i never ever worry about reading a piece from you that isn't amazing, because apparently THAT'S ALL YOU WRITE IS AMAZING POETRY..
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